XI WK III: Cereal (2-0) vs. Civil Rawr xD (0-2) (CEREAL WINS)

[symetrik]

Cereal -
I've decided to read your pieces by imagining some dude on a stage, half spoken word style, half rant. it feels like a piece about a drug dealer who built a small empire, who knows at the end of the day, despite the money coming in, they're just a small fish that's gotten a bit too big for its pond and every day the sharks come closer.

a little christian born atheist glue sniffer school skipper

i go from gangster art to ganster in the blink of an eye
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but i keep the people that built my castle alive

best lines. it was decently tied to the topic, just hard to read unless the reader figures out a style that fits.

Civil -
I know last week I said "gosh guys give some feedback that is useful" but this is a fucking struggle. your writing style lives up to your name and there was no connection to the topic. I think the imagery of going to church and thinking of spiders could have been a really cool central theme if handled, but boy was this not handled — no dope lines.

vote: Cereal, the lesser of two evils