XI WK III: Cereal (2-0) vs. Civil Rawr xD (0-2) (CEREAL WINS)
 

VERSES: Tuesday, December, 20th, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 24 Hour Ext: Mod/Opponent Discretion

VOTES: Friday December, 23rd, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 3 Vote Requirement Enforced/Penalty

MAXIMUM: 48 Lines: 64 IF AGREED UPON!


TOPIC:

TOPIC:

Secret handshakes, shaken keys
Bleed blood blue all dreams golden by the teeth for the teat..
Souls sold on the block
In the radio station talking..
Warning SHOTS

"every time you on those streets..
it fades like chalk and bubbles pop real soft as it drifts off

Names named if they even cross the road - snow blown
with coke on the nose - soaked shown

people in the suburbs like broke ass hoes round xmas time
to the catholic virgins behind glass while they stay during fresh desk mind ---
expansion shine like goose down, expanding from reading and writing, remembering everything
through hotel to prison the best girls and boys to sleep next to
a little christian born atheist glue sniffer school skipper like im waiting for those superman to say "i do"

i keep flying straight what could bend my neck from my chosen art
hip hop pure as belief

my single moves over the net, but the album by face to face
i hit world wide and become a new york legend in a minute off my dead fathers watch saving gace..
amen

....

As day drifts in and out, i got the world i built
it is what you make it, the la cats told me on the way to my field
but now the name in the air and they def after the fans
with death threats and round ups like virus spam pop ups peeps banned
neighbour wise when we was cool
im gonna have to come up out the piss pool
flash the monopoly money and start clippen niggers for their fools gold

i go from gangster art to ganster in the blink of an eye
...
but i keep the people that built my castle alive
knowing though im living day by day any moment i could be killed
but the villiage that built the hip hop star sleep at night still..

--
is it a pillow over the face
a bullet to the head
od on the toilet
an arrest in the streets

all i know i lived for me, and people found their way to the sheets..

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.ph...027#post829027
http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=152263
http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=152251

If it’s mutany. 8 wouldn’t solve the puzzle
Behold thy realm






I caught her sleeping with another
No


If we were to ever live happily what would your first words be?
I can’t sing along to sad Melodie’s when they aren’t real
Cereal? I beg of you
Please kiss the glory of the light
Respect.


Do you have it? I think not
I doubt you’re even alive


Pass the fire like a pacifier to the Pastors fire
That’s right! I said it
I went to church and all I thought about were spiders
Wishing they would read me verses from the webs past
Fuck this


Dreaming of spiders
Praying to spiders
Living with spiders
Thinking of spiders
Playing with spiders
Talking to spiders
Laughing with spiders
Eating with spiders
Drinking with spiders
Betting with spiders
Listening to spiders
Sharing with spiders
Cumming to spiders
Cumming with spiders
Holding hands with spiders ( all 8 of them)

Fuck u cereal I hope you rot in shit

Cereal vs had more swag compare to Civil. Cereal vs flow better.
Civil vs alright to me not my cup of tea

Vote-Cereal

Cereal -
I've decided to read your pieces by imagining some dude on a stage, half spoken word style, half rant. it feels like a piece about a drug dealer who built a small empire, who knows at the end of the day, despite the money coming in, they're just a small fish that's gotten a bit too big for its pond and every day the sharks come closer.

best lines. it was decently tied to the topic, just hard to read unless the reader figures out a style that fits.

Civil -
I know last week I said "gosh guys give some feedback that is useful" but this is a fucking struggle. your writing style lives up to your name and there was no connection to the topic. I think the imagery of going to church and thinking of spiders could have been a really cool central theme if handled, but boy was this not handled — no dope lines.

vote: Cereal, the lesser of two evils

Got zelph here. Just outclassed serial

I got Civil rare here

Respect

Peace

VOTE FLAGGED!
 

Quote:

I am sure Civil has potential but I am not seeing it here. Cereal this is an easy W for you Brother for obvious reasons.

Cereal - This was actually a bit more structured story wise then your usual stuff the metaphors behind money the struggles for it and the consequences that come with materialism the highs and lows of drug dealer /addict i mean you wrote this within a few hours the topic was posted but it wasn't a bad read considering it was possible troll post i never know with you nor do I care tbh it was better then your opponents.


Civil - Listening to spiders
Sharing with spiders
Cumming to spiders
Cumming with spiders
Holding hands with spiders ( all 8 of them)

lol that's just crazy i mean you could have taken this battle storywise if actually continued what you started with.. but once again troll posting.. i should give you the W for the simple fact Cereal gave Sral a W over me about a emo snowman and someones dead father I personally hate soft emo verse's that read like a hallmark card and simple rhyme schemes that use frail but decadent wordplay...but i been around the site long enough to know people play favorites and have there own styles they prefer .. regardless I can't be salty bout it and have to keep it fair not everyone gives two shits about these man poem tournaments and your verse this week clearly shows it ..I did laugh at cumming with spiders tho lol..


Vote- Cereal

I am sure Civil has potential but I am not seeing it here. Cereal this is an easy W for you Brother for obvious reasons.

Tied at 2-2

Let’s get more votes in fellas

I got Cereal here, by default.

Rawr, I laughed at a couple lines for sure.
Just too trolly to steal a W in a writing league bro, even against someone who writes so loosely and abstractly with room for improvement.

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