Deadman: MOROSE

Mr. J · 05-13-2013, 10:30 PM

This was pretty well done, I was digging the flow you were using
the word usage was on point as well, it seems like you stayed on point for the most part
I was digging the whole thing really, it did have a few hiccups here and there
but nothing really damaging to the piece, it seems like you know what you are doing
buuuuut...if you had more of a topic to roll with you might shine brighter...
get it right Rihanna....nice drop

05-13-2013, 10:30 PM	#6
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was pretty well done, I was digging the flow you were using the word usage was on point as well, it seems like you stayed on point for the most part I was digging the whole thing really, it did have a few hiccups here and there but nothing really damaging to the piece, it seems like you know what you are doing buuuuut...if you had more of a topic to roll with you might shine brighter... get it right Rihanna....nice drop