09-14-2015, 10:46 AM | #1 |
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09-14-2015, 01:57 PM | #2 |
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09-14-2015, 05:14 PM | #3 |
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@Spoken
Spoke's bitch love me, He ain't pleasin' so I'll make her leave him with no say or reason I offered her some business, she shooked on it and we both came to an agreement. It's D-Day - voters mind your own, or else expect his Brains in the brief case, spokane get crossed like US 395, no washington state free ways. handing this sonnin to u like pissed off Obstetricians; the delivery is mean, I'm new to the lime but whatever I body, is goundbreaking like I'm Timothy Green. Bring back up? I'll shoot u kids with gun play till both are impaired quick, or 1 footlong bullet can get rid of spokeman quicker than subway did to jared I'll set the alarm with this fire, prepare for this coffin, when there's smoke in the room, not celebrating early or counting chickens before they hatch but netcees spoke out, too soon This storyteller needs to go somewhere else. Don't fix it, if it aint broken, nerd No Campsite Poetry Jam; when I roast nuts n open fire on spoken.....word Last edited by puravida; 09-14-2015 at 05:25 PM. |
09-15-2015, 04:48 AM | #4 |
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Check I see ur 12 writing now
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09-16-2015, 05:28 PM | #5 |
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@purivada @Hush
You a hot boi? Stop. U prolly a "shuffle paper in a cubicle" nerd, Only time they want purifier is if someone wants hot water at work. Get off the molly. U aint bout that hard life, matter off fact swerve, I mean u force ur persona like ur concepts, worse than ladies at birth. Lets get to work, pull the blades to start carving ya sides, Ill remove everything but we'd still see a bitch in you when we look in ur eyes. Im loyal to my team. Quick to let the techs burst against phonies, Open and pour so many cans at one time.. im steve austin to the homies. Left hooks to the body N' let the right swing once u sleep on it partner, Its plane simple. Ill have these bombs drop u like the attack on pearl harbor. Ill stop by ur work and let the knife go without being cautious, Have ur dinner turn cold and wife upset. For the last time ur getting stuck at the office. Toe tagged!!!
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09-16-2015, 05:51 PM | #6 |
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Bring back up? I'll shoot u kids with gun play till both are impaired quick,
or 1 footlong bullet can get rid of spokeman quicker than subway did to jared Vs. You a hot boi? Stop. U prolly a "shuffle paper in a cubicle" nerd, Only time they want purifier is if someone wants hot water at work. Ill stop by ur work and let the knife go without being cautious, Have ur dinner turn cold and wife upset. For the last time ur getting stuck at the office. Didn't like much from pura's verse. He had some OK concepts here n there but his wording killed any sting they had. That spokesman line was aite but the Jared angle is played but it was still a decent np. Spoken word could've been aite done diff. Spokens verse wasnt too much better tbh. His opener was a good np but I didn't like the execution, could've been a lot harsher. Closer wasn't anything special but I liked the wording on it. Spokens misses weren't as bad imo so he got my vote. V. Spoken |
09-16-2015, 07:52 PM | #7 | ||
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v goes to puravida . to me he had bars that flowed and made sense more. the punches were good Spoken he had great bars as well but i feel as if some needed more to them. some lacked
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09-19-2015, 02:12 PM | #9 |
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handing this sonnin to u like pissed off Obstetricians; the delivery is mean,
I'm new to the lime but whatever I body, is goundbreaking like I'm Timothy Green. Bring back up? I'll shoot u kids with gun play till both are impaired quick, or 1 footlong bullet can get rid of spokeman quicker than subway did to jared - Jared bars been done 100 times already but this one was good vs Ill stop by ur work and let the knife go without being cautious, Have ur dinner turn cold and wife upset. For the last time ur getting stuck at the office. - Your best bar, rest fell flat and/or were wack/played Puravida got this |
09-22-2015, 10:19 AM | #10 |
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Didnt feel much from either but feel spoken had by far the better misses and 1 or 2 lights which could of been losds better with a bit of polished wording.
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09-25-2015, 09:13 AM | #12 |
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09-25-2015, 10:45 PM | #13 | ||
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cool battle props guys. had it 2-2 on quotes spoken had some bad misses to me imo pur with the more consistent verses and W V/ Puravida
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10-20-2015, 07:42 AM | #14 |
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Need some more votes to close this up and get it kicking again
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10-20-2015, 08:23 AM | #15 |
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Usually nameflips get tired when used back to back like that, but pura at least did a few oeriginal (to me at least) ones with it.
Spokeane was cool. I didn't mind Spokeman tbh because it was prob just a typo on dudes behalf, Spokesman still works. It isn't forced like someone else said. The Jared line is played now even for a current event, but I didn't mind the tie-in so much as the line wasn't that effective wording-wise. It fell a bit flat. Spoken had a couple of decent ideas/concepts, but they either felt a little old to me or a little played (even though his wording was far superior IMO). Purifier was dope. Forced/pregnancy shit was WACK lol. Bitch in you feels like i've seen it a hundred times before, idioms should prob be avoided unless they can be flipped fresh. Pearl Harbour is wayyy old. Stuck in the office is like Gjonaj's stuck in traffic line. I dunno, I liked Spoken's wording, but Pura's ideas were better/less played. Vote - Puravida
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10-20-2015, 11:29 AM | #16 |
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handing this sonnin to u like pissed off Obstetricians; the delivery is mean,
I'm new to the lime but whatever I body, is goundbreaking like I'm Timothy Green. vs Ill stop by ur work and let the knife go without being cautious, Have ur dinner turn cold and wife upset. For the last time ur getting stuck at the office. Puravida ever so slightly had spoken at first but some of his misses we're bad Vote- pura |
10-21-2015, 04:28 AM | #17 |
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Pura wins
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