The Homeless Man

Flow · 07-28-2015, 08:19 PM

Really enjoyed this, ain't seen many polished pieces like this in a while that have a good story both narratively and metaphorically. Seemed legit, don't go becoming homeless thinking it's a better life for you!

On the realzy, the first para was spot on, flowed effortlessly and set up what to expect, felt the middle sort of become a bit choppy in places but this is usually the case when trying to get good content across an I'm nit picking. The last para was killer, def the best bit and left me thinking. Great vocab used which is always a breath of fresh air an all.

Top read.

07-28-2015, 08:19 PM	#17
Flow Upset Champion Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: West Mids Posts: 3,861 Battle Record: 57-49 Accomplishments - 50 Wins Champed - BA Rookie Tourney - 1-2 Punch League (x2) - Pandemonium Cypher - 1-2 Punch league Season 9 Rep Power: 24894581	Really enjoyed this, ain't seen many polished pieces like this in a while that have a good story both narratively and metaphorically. Seemed legit, don't go becoming homeless thinking it's a better life for you! On the realzy, the first para was spot on, flowed effortlessly and set up what to expect, felt the middle sort of become a bit choppy in places but this is usually the case when trying to get good content across an I'm nit picking. The last para was killer, def the best bit and left me thinking. Great vocab used which is always a breath of fresh air an all. Top read.