Notebook vs. Jason Todd - NOTEBOOK WINS

Window Taco · 10-04-2014, 03:17 PM

NOTEBOOK

Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck
You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up
Solid line in every cat. It's more effective at the subtlety good wordplay and the flow.
Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son
Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21
Pretty good line except for the flow being off just a bit and the punch not being as fresh as your opener. Still a pretty good line though.
You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props
Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops
Didn't like this one. It's too played IMO.
Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude
Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL
Not the freshest line but since you tied it into the nameplay that makes it work and helps it to be a pretty good line.
On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker
Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst...
Solid punch. Didn't like that u stayed with the batman shit but everything is on point here but the flow is off a bit and so is the end rhyme. It is better than Dagel's though.

Dagel

I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave,
put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape.
Coming simple is cool but when you go simplistic it needs to be much more creative or executed in a different way, so this punch didn't connect to me.
Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent,
this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island.
Nice nameplay and it is an example of a simplistic bar that you add a lil humor and creativity to to make it a dope bar. Good shit!
Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch,
years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes.
The lines here have no sting and it is def not better than note's third bar. It seems very keyed.
You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum,
you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin.
Another line that seems keyed and the punch is not elaborated on enough and it lacks sting.
I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate,
words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates.
Would have been good if the punch wasn't played.

Overall, Note took a little more time to write his verse it seems and Todd keyed mostly every line or every line and only had one strong bar IMO. It seems though had Todd took time to write this battle could have turned out different as evidenced by his 2nd Bar.

V/NOTEBOOK

10-04-2014, 03:17 PM	#12
Window Taco can I help u? Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 236 Battle Record: 0-4 Rep Power: 888974	NOTEBOOK Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up Solid line in every cat. It's more effective at the subtlety good wordplay and the flow. Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21 Pretty good line except for the flow being off just a bit and the punch not being as fresh as your opener. Still a pretty good line though. You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops Didn't like this one. It's too played IMO. Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL Not the freshest line but since you tied it into the nameplay that makes it work and helps it to be a pretty good line. On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst... Solid punch. Didn't like that u stayed with the batman shit but everything is on point here but the flow is off a bit and so is the end rhyme. It is better than Dagel's though. Dagel I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave, put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape. Coming simple is cool but when you go simplistic it needs to be much more creative or executed in a different way, so this punch didn't connect to me. Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent, this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island. Nice nameplay and it is an example of a simplistic bar that you add a lil humor and creativity to to make it a dope bar. Good shit! Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch, years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes. The lines here have no sting and it is def not better than note's third bar. It seems very keyed. You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum, you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin. Another line that seems keyed and the punch is not elaborated on enough and it lacks sting. I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate, words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates. Would have been good if the punch wasn't played. Overall, Note took a little more time to write his verse it seems and Todd keyed mostly every line or every line and only had one strong bar IMO. It seems though had Todd took time to write this battle could have turned out different as evidenced by his 2nd Bar. V/NOTEBOOK __________________ aka windu tuako