Notebook vs. Jason Todd - NOTEBOOK WINS

Notebook · 08-26-2014, 10:53 PM

Text Battle.

10 lines.
House Rules.
Deadline: 24 hours.

Notebook · 08-26-2014, 10:53 PM

Check!

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?p=3...d=1#post390721
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?p=3...d=1#post390739

Dagel · 08-26-2014, 10:53 PM

Check goodluck

Notebook · 08-27-2014, 12:38 AM

Good luck!

Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck
You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up
Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son
Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21
You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props
Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops
Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude
Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL
On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker
Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst...

Explanations:
Line 2: Cunt Re-evaluating Motifs = Country Evaluating Motives | Harmony's Fucked Up = Harm & He's Fucked Up

Dagel · 08-27-2014, 02:38 PM

I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave,
put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape.
Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent,
this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island.
Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch,
years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes.
You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum,
you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin.
I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate,
words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates.

Paradigm · 09-10-2014, 02:59 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Notebook

Good luck!

Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck
You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up
lol longbar swag. Cool concept. Connection is off. Wordplay is cool but they really hate all wordplay here man stop it
Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son
Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21
Semi Miss - not feeling this to wordy
You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props
Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops
Miss - not feeling.
Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude
Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL
Miss - youre better than this lol
On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker
Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst...
Miss played

Explanations:
Line 2: Cunt Re-evaluating Motifs = Country Evaluating Motives | Harmony's Fucked Up = Harm & He's Fucked Up
dont do this

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dagel

I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave,
put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape.
Miss - no.
Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent,
this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island.
Miss - no concept here
Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch,
years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes.
Miss - no punch
You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum,
you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin.
Miss no concept or punch
I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate,
words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates.
no punch

Dagel didn't throw a punch or come with any form of a concept. Not a good battle. Notebook needs to shake the rust off and read around for netcees shortbar style and Dagel needs to throw a punch or a concept at notebook. Notebook takes this for having concepts in his bars.

Vote - Notebook

Clayray · 09-10-2014, 09:53 AM

I didn't know if I was reading a battle or an OM drop.

V - Notebook. For ATLEAST trying.

1.

jilti · 09-10-2014, 10:18 AM

Note..

Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck
You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up
ok opener, liked the flow better than the punch
Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son
Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21
lol feeling this
You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props
Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops
ok
Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude
Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL
decent because the flow was on point
On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker
Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst...
ok punch

Note-some shortening of lines would help out alot because u have the technical stuff down

Vs

J todd..

I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave,
put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape.
lol simple and to the point, probably lotb
Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent,
this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island.
nope
Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch,
years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes.
lol funny and nice flow, but closer to a miss than hit
You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum,
you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin.
miss
I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate,
words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates.
nope

this was an enjoyable battle to read, props to both
mvgt- notebook

Notebook · 09-13-2014, 12:23 AM

Thanks for the votes, guys. I'm going to tighten up and get back in tune with everything, haha.

Blanco Bishop · 09-13-2014, 03:19 AM

I actually thought notebook was a too wordyfor the style we employ here.

Imo dagel took it with the opener.
That was dope to me.

V dagel

BROKE LESNAR · 09-22-2014, 08:57 PM

lmao fuck

Window Taco · 10-04-2014, 03:17 PM

NOTEBOOK

Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck
You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up
Solid line in every cat. It's more effective at the subtlety good wordplay and the flow.
Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son
Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21
Pretty good line except for the flow being off just a bit and the punch not being as fresh as your opener. Still a pretty good line though.
You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props
Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops
Didn't like this one. It's too played IMO.
Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude
Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL
Not the freshest line but since you tied it into the nameplay that makes it work and helps it to be a pretty good line.
On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker
Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst...
Solid punch. Didn't like that u stayed with the batman shit but everything is on point here but the flow is off a bit and so is the end rhyme. It is better than Dagel's though.

Dagel

I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave,
put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape.
Coming simple is cool but when you go simplistic it needs to be much more creative or executed in a different way, so this punch didn't connect to me.
Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent,
this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island.
Nice nameplay and it is an example of a simplistic bar that you add a lil humor and creativity to to make it a dope bar. Good shit!
Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch,
years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes.
The lines here have no sting and it is def not better than note's third bar. It seems very keyed.
You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum,
you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin.
Another line that seems keyed and the punch is not elaborated on enough and it lacks sting.
I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate,
words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates.
Would have been good if the punch wasn't played.

Overall, Note took a little more time to write his verse it seems and Todd keyed mostly every line or every line and only had one strong bar IMO. It seems though had Todd took time to write this battle could have turned out different as evidenced by his 2nd Bar.

V/NOTEBOOK

08-26-2014, 10:53 PM	#1
Notebook fanlink.to/Notebook Join Date: Feb 2014 Location: Hell. Posts: 49 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 0	Notebook vs. Jason Todd - NOTEBOOK WINS Text Battle. 10 lines. House Rules. Deadline: 24 hours.

08-26-2014, 10:53 PM	#2
Notebook fanlink.to/Notebook Join Date: Feb 2014 Location: Hell. Posts: 49 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 0	Check! http://netcees.co/showthread.php?p=3...d=1#post390721 http://netcees.co/showthread.php?p=3...d=1#post390739 Last edited by Notebook; 08-27-2014 at 03:31 PM.

08-26-2014, 10:53 PM	#3
Dagel BITER. Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: BITER. Posts: 75 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	Check goodluck __________________ BITER.

08-27-2014, 12:38 AM	#4
Notebook fanlink.to/Notebook Join Date: Feb 2014 Location: Hell. Posts: 49 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 0	Good luck! Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21 You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst... Explanations: Line 2: Cunt Re-evaluating Motifs = Country Evaluating Motives \| Harmony's Fucked Up = Harm & He's Fucked Up Last edited by Notebook; 08-27-2014 at 12:40 AM.

08-27-2014, 02:38 PM	#5
Dagel BITER. Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: BITER. Posts: 75 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave, put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape. Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent, this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island. Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch, years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes. You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum, you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin. I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate, words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates. __________________ BITER.

09-10-2014, 09:53 AM	#7
Clayray 6ft of Seperation Join Date: Aug 2010 Posts: 1,541 Battle Record: 3-5 Champed - Faggot of the Year (2015) Rep Power: 0	I didn't know if I was reading a battle or an OM drop. V - Notebook. For ATLEAST trying. 1. __________________ GraveyardShift

09-10-2014, 10:18 AM	#8
jilti neckties Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,629 Battle Record: 43-19 Champed - BA Cypher - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 20816225	Note.. Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up ok opener, liked the flow better than the punch Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21 lol feeling this You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops ok Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL decent because the flow was on point On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst... ok punch Note-some shortening of lines would help out alot because u have the technical stuff down Vs J todd.. I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave, put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape. lol simple and to the point, probably lotb Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent, this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island. nope Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch, years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes. lol funny and nice flow, but closer to a miss than hit You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum, you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin. miss I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate, words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates. nope this was an enjoyable battle to read, props to both mvgt- notebook

09-13-2014, 12:23 AM	#9
Notebook fanlink.to/Notebook Join Date: Feb 2014 Location: Hell. Posts: 49 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 0	Thanks for the votes, guys. I'm going to tighten up and get back in tune with everything, haha.

09-13-2014, 03:19 AM	#10
Blanco Bishop Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: Cali Posts: 1,460 Battle Record: 11-20 Rep Power: 4150482	I actually thought notebook was a too wordyfor the style we employ here. Imo dagel took it with the opener. That was dope to me. V dagel

09-22-2014, 08:57 PM	#11
BROKE LESNAR βгοкε ㄴεςηαг Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 2,245 Battle Record: 9-4 Champed - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 12760961	jdjd lmao fuck Last edited by BROKE LESNAR; 09-22-2014 at 09:25 PM.

10-04-2014, 03:17 PM	#12
Window Taco can I help u? Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 236 Battle Record: 0-4 Rep Power: 888971	NOTEBOOK Better THINK AGAIN before he starts any ruckus, like the U.S vs. Kim Jong-un's army, you dumb fuck You'll panic when I damage. Have this cunt Re-evaluating Motifs...a little bit of Harmony's Fucked Up Solid line in every cat. It's more effective at the subtlety good wordplay and the flow. Double-Wielded Pistols will end his luck; act like a Female, A Pair'll show him the depths of Heaven, son Get left disgusting, 'cause I Crop Tops Down to the Belly Button...like Women's Clothes at Forever 21 Pretty good line except for the flow being off just a bit and the punch not being as fresh as your opener. Still a pretty good line though. You being hot is a Stage Act. That's your best bet at seein' Props Your record's a freakin' flop. So, the only time we rush to buy J's is when the sneaker drops Didn't like this one. It's too played IMO. Fuck the gimmick you're rocking, dude Fom the City of Gotham? You must be privy to fiction 'cause your identity's COMICAL Not the freshest line but since you tied it into the nameplay that makes it work and helps it to be a pretty good line. On a Dark Night, this Bat, Man....will get rid of this Joker Split your face like Harvey Dent's from the acid-drip with a blow that could practically make your skull burst... Solid punch. Didn't like that u stayed with the batman shit but everything is on point here but the flow is off a bit and so is the end rhyme. It is better than Dagel's though. Dagel I'll bury you without a shovel, leave ya in a grave, put your head so far underground you'd release a mixtape. Coming simple is cool but when you go simplistic it needs to be much more creative or executed in a different way, so this punch didn't connect to me. Nobody wants you on the mic, so just keep silent, this notebook profiles a creep, he dreams of a lonely island. Nice nameplay and it is an example of a simplistic bar that you add a lil humor and creativity to to make it a dope bar. Good shit! Coming with long bars, shit concepts and vague hits bitch, years of mental scars, a dick complex and gay wishes. The lines here have no sting and it is def not better than note's third bar. It seems very keyed. You're like Weezy if he tried to make it on a rap forum, you're a bad omen, killing text battles with crap torchin. Another line that seems keyed and the punch is not elaborated on enough and it lacks sting. I handle this bitch like I was sent by the state to terminate, words like an axe, ripping through your face as it gurgitates. Would have been good if the punch wasn't played. Overall, Note took a little more time to write his verse it seems and Todd keyed mostly every line or every line and only had one strong bar IMO. It seems though had Todd took time to write this battle could have turned out different as evidenced by his 2nd Bar. V/NOTEBOOK __________________ aka windu tuako