meh... practice

sral · 08-19-2014, 05:07 AM

LOL not sure if 'Red Coats' are the same thing over there, but here they're holiday entertainers. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Butlins_Redcoats

So that line made me chuckle. Stand in range, cannons aimed - fifty 40 pounders shift
Para Lies? You weren't crushed & dull boy properly operated the forklift
I fucking hate Topicalists 99% of you are trolls & nerdy
My favorite Coat Tale is where you rode each others & Exited the Tourney

Those last four were good ideas, closer the best IMHO, as I'm sure the para lies thing has been used on you at some point. It just has to have been.

Opening and closing bars of the second verse were the best, really felt the last one.

Keep that pen moving!

RTF: http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=89375

08-19-2014, 05:07 AM	#2
sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,609 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	LOL not sure if 'Red Coats' are the same thing over there, but here they're holiday entertainers. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Butlins_Redcoats So that line made me chuckle. Stand in range, cannons aimed - fifty 40 pounders shift Para Lies? You weren't crushed & dull boy properly operated the forklift I fucking hate Topicalists 99% of you are trolls & nerdy My favorite Coat Tale is where you rode each others & Exited the Tourney Those last four were good ideas, closer the best IMHO, as I'm sure the para lies thing has been used on you at some point. It just has to have been. Opening and closing bars of the second verse were the best, really felt the last one. Keep that pen moving! RTF: http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=89375 __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)