meh... practice

[Paradigm]

I didn't know I had to give you personal feedback to get feedback here in the om but if you would like me to give you feedback I will give it back in return. I just assume if people post they would give some type of quality feedback every time like they do on every other site i've been on. My bad. I apologize Certain. You don't have to be so salty though friend.

[Scripter]

Originally Posted by Paradigm

I didn't know I had to give you personal feedback to get feedback here in the om but if you would like me to give you feedback I will give it back in return. I just assume if people post they would give some type of quality feedback every time like they do on every other site i've been on. My bad. I apologize Certain. You don't have to be so salty though friend.

this site does suck for feedback

[oats]

Originally Posted by Scripter

this site does suck for feedback

Originally Posted by Scripter

LMFAO sweet!!!!

:-/


Who've you defeated? Every HoF i've versed was beaten.
I'm God so don't Question who 'I Am, THAT I Am' is Alpha Omega, heathen

this was bad tbh. I get the reference, but other than the god/I am that I am/alpha omega connection it isn't a punch, or even a sensible play, just loose associations crammed into a single line

Beginners vs IHH Legends. Vets decide & vote the winner
Bey/Kin Rapped around this Fresh Meat & cooked'em raw like Diodes dinner

this was a solid hit, idk who kin is but I don't need to in order to understand the line

Beyond & I formed a phalanx. Impregnable styled rhymes
Netcees Read Coats Formation... & their murder in a single file line

honestly, this was significantly better than the red coats line in our battle, which was worded horrifically.

If Muskets flare I'm never scared & charge with Bayonets
I've got a Gun Attachment, You're attached to Neigh's display of text

the personal is lost on me tbh, I wasn't aware Certain was attached to neighbor's text game. if true, it's a pretty decent line

Stand in range, cannons aimed - fifty 40 pounders shift
Para Lies? You weren't crushed & dull boy properly operated the forklift

wording fucked this up on the "you weren't crushed" part. I think you meant to say "you were crushed" (by the fifty 40 pounders) and then contrast it with the dull boy bit. good concept though

I fucking hate Topicalists 99% of you are trolls & nerdy
My favorite Coat Tale is where you rode each others & Exited the Tourney

lol this was dope

meh

Get Peaced before the first round when the hands be fired
got everyone laughing if you throw One like Bigg K versus Danny Myers

haven't watched the battle yet, now I kinda want to

Ironic 10 Guns Holstered if you try to attack & murder me
You got Para Medics, when they left with YOUR body strapped, to a gurney

predictable the way you worded it

We run blocks, do dirt & buck shots at the meanest crews
You are all imposters faking that walk of life & wear those Adidas shoes

someone in the tag tourney had a better adidas shoes line than this, which makes this a little weak from my perspective but still a decent line I guess

Pistol whips'll slit ya throat then watch'em bleed & suffer
Vocal cord between these two cans like each hand tryna talk to each other

also dope


overall, a solid compilation of ideas that were good enough to write somewhere, though probably not good enough to be in a formal battle. two dope lines in here though