Cyborganic

Vulgar · 03-15-2014, 11:54 AM

I like that woman in the picture. Is it a screenshot from a movie? That'd be cool if it was a photomanipulation.

A double-edged arrow to the heart of the seed
^This was my favorite line. Interesting idea.

You have a knack for wording your lines well, and also for imaginative concepts placed in concession with one another at a steady pace. You allowed room for your lines to breathe, rhyming them with finesse. I would've went a little heavier on the relationship aspect. There are tons of opportunities for using man and woman in a cybernetic/organic context.

Good work. @Mael

Keep doing you

03-15-2014, 11:54 AM	#6
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	I like that woman in the picture. Is it a screenshot from a movie? That'd be cool if it was a photomanipulation. A double-edged arrow to the heart of the seed ^This was my favorite line. Interesting idea. You have a knack for wording your lines well, and also for imaginative concepts placed in concession with one another at a steady pace. You allowed room for your lines to breathe, rhyming them with finesse. I would've went a little heavier on the relationship aspect. There are tons of opportunities for using man and woman in a cybernetic/organic context. Good work. @Mael Keep doing you