Poisoning the Kingdom Of Doma

Mr. J · 09-16-2013, 02:29 PM

I misuse calculus arrange the alphabet in backwardness
change the tide, move the beach and the manicurist..
we got a winner, still not the brightest on the squad car
the awkwardness causes this Romeo to turn to Agbar..
I go when the Jet leaves, send a kick and howl to the moon
more beef to put my fork in, shouldn't have doubted the fool
routed the spoon for the jugular, and dug deep for some pride
found the beauty in destruction through the ugliness of life
cunning and blind just enough to plant that bug in your mind
til' the point the truth is too much to stomach and ruptures the spine
laughter with a touch of defiance, the feeling of nothing in life
writings the phonecall to being a deity and I'm cutting the line
no one deserves a glimpse of what I am, the assumptions is fine...
the martyr of mayhem, playing without a full deck and no marbles
burned down the pyramids with my wallet leaving Imhotep to marvel
coated Jimi Hendrix, God flow sent from 3 Wise men sippin' apostles
the coup de grace, treat the milky way as a soup to God
shoot flaming arrows from the bowl, change the stars and salute the odds..
back to how I used to talk...
the board became a kiddes pool & the OM's my amusement park
brought out the train set for the run on sentences & useless arch's
stuff your mouth sweetie, put the flame to their heads...let's have a Lucille Ball...
about to have the hocus pocus dead locked and sealed off...
like...what's the big deal y'all...it's only water...

veritas · 09-16-2013, 04:57 PM

that you have mentioned Kefka's treasonous act as your title makes me both respect you and hate you at the same time.

Dove Dozer · 09-17-2013, 07:51 PM

Very nice man.. i really found this enjoyable to read. Flow was nice and your wording was vivid. Imagery was real nice man.

Flow was butter.

Solid piece. Thax for feeding mine man. Appreciate it

Zen · 09-20-2013, 04:39 PM

Dude this is the longest piece I've ever seen from you. Usually they're like ten lines lol. But as for this piece, nice. Looks like you've progressed since I last read your shit. Really enjoyed this. I'll leave more in depth feed when I get on my laptop I'm on my phone right and I hate typing on this shit lol

e11even · 09-20-2013, 07:56 PM

the bendings of language, awesome stuff. I admire this type of piece above many others. I'll definitely keep reading your material. i'm inspired.

Mr. J · 09-23-2013, 06:48 PM

I am intrigued... I really am

Dove Dozer · 09-23-2013, 06:57 PM

HOF worthy drop man

Phanes · 09-24-2013, 02:19 AM

haha, FF references. there's some well written lines in this for sure. i really liked how you worded that phone call line also

Mr. J · 09-26-2013, 07:55 PM

Mr. J · 09-29-2013, 03:56 PM

*Ahem*

Darth Yoda · 09-29-2013, 07:32 PM

I feel like you're preaching to me. I don't like when people preach throughout an entire verse.

Martyr of Mayhem.

Sounds cool, hard to grasp.

Mr. J · 10-01-2013, 06:21 PM

quite surprising feedback from the randoms....

I'm surprised no one likes the ending though...red heads
fire...witches...water & such

09-16-2013, 02:29 PM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Poisoning the Kingdom Of Doma I misuse calculus arrange the alphabet in backwardness change the tide, move the beach and the manicurist.. we got a winner, still not the brightest on the squad car the awkwardness causes this Romeo to turn to Agbar.. I go when the Jet leaves, send a kick and howl to the moon more beef to put my fork in, shouldn't have doubted the fool routed the spoon for the jugular, and dug deep for some pride found the beauty in destruction through the ugliness of life cunning and blind just enough to plant that bug in your mind til' the point the truth is too much to stomach and ruptures the spine laughter with a touch of defiance, the feeling of nothing in life writings the phonecall to being a deity and I'm cutting the line no one deserves a glimpse of what I am, the assumptions is fine... the martyr of mayhem, playing without a full deck and no marbles burned down the pyramids with my wallet leaving Imhotep to marvel coated Jimi Hendrix, God flow sent from 3 Wise men sippin' apostles the coup de grace, treat the milky way as a soup to God shoot flaming arrows from the bowl, change the stars and salute the odds.. back to how I used to talk... the board became a kiddes pool & the OM's my amusement park brought out the train set for the run on sentences & useless arch's stuff your mouth sweetie, put the flame to their heads...let's have a Lucille Ball... about to have the hocus pocus dead locked and sealed off... like...what's the big deal y'all...it's only water... __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you Last edited by Mr. J; 09-17-2013 at 06:47 PM.

09-17-2013, 07:51 PM	#3
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,077 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853216	Very nice man.. i really found this enjoyable to read. Flow was nice and your wording was vivid. Imagery was real nice man. Flow was butter. Solid piece. Thax for feeding mine man. Appreciate it __________________

09-20-2013, 07:56 PM	#5
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	the bendings of language, awesome stuff. I admire this type of piece above many others. I'll definitely keep reading your material. i'm inspired. __________________ Ahem.

09-23-2013, 06:48 PM	#6
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	I am intrigued... I really am __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

09-23-2013, 06:57 PM	#7
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,077 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853216	HOF worthy drop man __________________

09-20-2013, 04:39 PM	#4
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Dude this is the longest piece I've ever seen from you. Usually they're like ten lines lol. But as for this piece, nice. Looks like you've progressed since I last read your shit. Really enjoyed this. I'll leave more in depth feed when I get on my laptop I'm on my phone right and I hate typing on this shit lol

09-24-2013, 02:19 AM	#8
Phanes Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 16 Rep Power: 0	haha, FF references. there's some well written lines in this for sure. i really liked how you worded that phone call line also

09-29-2013, 03:56 PM	#10
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Ahem __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

09-29-2013, 07:32 PM	#11
Darth Yoda Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 408 Battle Record: 6-2 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF Rep Power: 20182439	I feel like you're preaching to me. I don't like when people preach throughout an entire verse. Martyr of Mayhem. Sounds cool, hard to grasp.

10-01-2013, 06:21 PM	#12
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	quite surprising feedback from the randoms.... I'm surprised no one likes the ending though...red heads fire...witches...water & such __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you