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Mr. J 09-16-2013 02:29 PM

Poisoning the Kingdom Of Doma
 
I misuse calculus arrange the alphabet in backwardness
change the tide, move the beach and the manicurist..
we got a winner, still not the brightest on the squad car
the awkwardness causes this Romeo to turn to Agbar..
I go when the Jet leaves, send a kick and howl to the moon
more beef to put my fork in, shouldn't have doubted the fool
routed the spoon for the jugular, and dug deep for some pride
found the beauty in destruction through the ugliness of life
cunning and blind just enough to plant that bug in your mind
til' the point the truth is too much to stomach and ruptures the spine
laughter with a touch of defiance, the feeling of nothing in life
writings the phonecall to being a deity and I'm cutting the line
no one deserves a glimpse of what I am, the assumptions is fine...
the martyr of mayhem, playing without a full deck and no marbles
burned down the pyramids with my wallet leaving Imhotep to marvel
coated Jimi Hendrix, God flow sent from 3 Wise men sippin' apostles
the coup de grace, treat the milky way as a soup to God
shoot flaming arrows from the bowl, change the stars and salute the odds..
back to how I used to talk...
the board became a kiddes pool & the OM's my amusement park
brought out the train set for the run on sentences & useless arch's
stuff your mouth sweetie, put the flame to their heads...let's have a Lucille Ball...
about to have the hocus pocus dead locked and sealed off...
like...what's the big deal y'all...it's only water...

veritas 09-16-2013 04:57 PM

that you have mentioned Kefka's treasonous act as your title makes me both respect you and hate you at the same time.

Dove Dozer 09-17-2013 07:51 PM

Very nice man.. i really found this enjoyable to read. Flow was nice and your wording was vivid. Imagery was real nice man.

Flow was butter.

Solid piece. Thax for feeding mine man. Appreciate it

Zen 09-20-2013 04:39 PM

Dude this is the longest piece I've ever seen from you. Usually they're like ten lines lol. But as for this piece, nice. Looks like you've progressed since I last read your shit. Really enjoyed this. I'll leave more in depth feed when I get on my laptop I'm on my phone right and I hate typing on this shit lol

e11even 09-20-2013 07:56 PM

the bendings of language, awesome stuff. I admire this type of piece above many others. I'll definitely keep reading your material. i'm inspired.

Mr. J 09-23-2013 06:48 PM

I am intrigued... I really am

Dove Dozer 09-23-2013 06:57 PM

HOF worthy drop man

Phanes 09-24-2013 02:19 AM

haha, FF references. there's some well written lines in this for sure. i really liked how you worded that phone call line also

Mr. J 09-26-2013 07:55 PM

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=siuWZxDMGnk

Mr. J 09-29-2013 03:56 PM

*Ahem*

Darth Yoda 09-29-2013 07:32 PM

I feel like you're preaching to me. I don't like when people preach throughout an entire verse.

Martyr of Mayhem.

Sounds cool, hard to grasp.

Mr. J 10-01-2013 06:21 PM

quite surprising feedback from the randoms....


I'm surprised no one likes the ending though...red heads
fire...witches...water & such


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