10-01-2021, 08:42 PM | #1 |
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this is way too long im sorry
how's it going,
i asked quietly .. the pause was profound i shifted in my seat. you took a sip of your crown royal cola, numb our mystery until it boils over copper plate of slimy filet, side oily okra. you make me write and make me post it swim inside my safety ocean lay me down a deep disposal, hang me or i may get frozen. intercoastal weapon holder, metamorphic headless horseman ex-performer pencil in these memoirs smoke and allegory acid washed, receptors torched amphetamine > melatonin never slept in REM for more than 7 seconds in a row kick sketcher soles down any road where we could grab a pretzel roll for less than Jersey traffic tolls to get wherever legends go. i'm tethered to a sense of hopeless, socialize my fellow dosers weather change my testimony. hella phony, empty hole museum campus megaphone. we feigned as intellectuals pedestal the senate thrones they'd bathe in blood for twenty votes stem cells in my breakfast bowl i'll live to see our bubble blow subsidized our public and we privatized the money flow double-wide abundance all tongue-tied inside our bungalows polyester comfort zone. sun lamp / artificial snow then wonder where our "somethings" go. forget them while we butter toast and dry erase our fantasies on fridges every month or so ice dispenser. sprite and seltzer. leave me to my nightly bender DUI my license plate expired in 1997 high as heaven. set a fire to everything. the dead occultist breaking down like ethanol anxiety, i'm sweating Bulleits sellers market, plague of locusts bear attacks, forever bullish derivatives and leverage open, trojan horse your credit quotient megachurch and crypto tokens digitize our disco potions syrup blend the rum and rose til gardens grow from brick and mortar boneyard man, slow striding knowing death is a promise we're threads inside a universal energy harvest take me back to Everything. i've wandered too long hoping one day Thunderclap would ring the alarm leading us to symbol and psalm. lipid dissolve so far from any answer now the questions are wrong curious and calm unsettled spirit at heart stare at mirrors in the dark, so finally i can hear myself talk what a nightmare
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10-01-2021, 08:55 PM | #2 |
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What a nightmare is right. Dope stuff and not too long your flow and word choices make for a easy read. Good stuff
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This was cool
"and dry erase our fantasies on fridges every month or so" nice |
10-02-2021, 12:51 AM | #4 |
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Imagine reading this and being like 'this was cool' I would rather die than say something like that.
If Aero posted it for you? Maybe. Silly good.
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10-02-2021, 04:41 PM | #5 |
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Youre still cool cake
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10-02-2021, 07:54 PM | #6 |
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I fucking love you man. Fuck. Your skillset is everything i always wanted mine to be.
Your biggest fan.. -Geno
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Dude when I got to the 7 seconds of rem and was heck yeah. You are my favorite besides myself
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Just read this again and want to quote the whole stock market and lipid part. Sheesh.
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mc's at work folks great wordplay
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10-03-2021, 02:05 PM | #10 |
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Very nice replies. Thank you guys sincerely.
Rough week so it’s appreciated
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This would be dope af over a RZA type beat. Good shit man.
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Thx. How’s it going Dagel?
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Just living man. Relaxing during the weekend. Yourself?
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10-03-2021, 04:33 PM | #14 |
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still typing this bullshit into a green square so that should tell you something
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10-04-2021, 02:28 AM | #15 |
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anxiety, i'm sweating Bulleits
sellers market, plague of locusts bear attacks, forever bullish derivatives and leverage open, trojan horse your credit quotient megachurch and crypto tokens digitize our disco potions Loved the coin references here man. Checking back in for a second go here. This thing really picks up steam as you read it and its like a good book. The more you read the more you want to continue reading at a faster pace to absorb as much as possible before you fall asleep with the book in your hand and lose your place. This is that book, but i finished mine twice lol
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I’ve been around 20 years and I’m not sure I’ve seen it done better.
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Peace king
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Your text is liquid still I see. Nice.
Glad I found my way back and was able to catch this piece from you. Didn't think it was too long lol... I have some things to show everyone.. hehe Couple years ago I started writing heavily and only posted to my fb so I have some words I will grace the open mic with for a bit. Hope you staying dead, man lol. Felt this heat up toward the end. Fellow dosers 1997 energy harvest month or so.. key points for me. Stay up black
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I started quoting highlights then I stopped cuz I think the whole piece is fucking dope.
I'll have to echo what Zuch said. This might even read better in paragraph format. Just my opinion. Anyway, keep it up. |
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This whole thing is quatable because it fed off each line if even one line is removed the whole composition is screwed. Tbh. Loved the content as per usual my dear friend blacketh... The grammar surprising hiccups but i believe it happens time to time buuuut it didnt take away of how grrat this read was and the style switched tbh since the last time i was on and read the dead mans work. None the less neat clean and dope sauce.
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