Alcohol Wizard (Key)

Natural · 08-27-2013, 02:04 AM

Yes they're innocent memories, but I still kill em endlessly
Liquid drizzlin drinking whiskey mesmorize the misery
Sickening addiction with thinking mixed in, its evil wizardry
Does it ever sink in? Emotional bickering mimicking weakness
Sleepless weekdays and weekends repeating itself in sequence
Feeding depression, depleting dopamine nueron firing frequence
Chemical changes, general genetics rearranging wildly
Some call it an alcoholic, science solves it as a disease evolving
It don't matter the label, its sooner or later fatal, societal apalling
Rock bottom gets lower every year, falling to a untitled teir
I find myself crawling calling fear, to release me and disappear
Satin sayin its stayin in attack formation to make an invasion here
In my body, my temple, its rotting my mental focus, its naughty
Corrosive to organs, dosing engorges the liver, poisoning problem
Living and dying by the choices, I wish they would've wasted a breathe
A curse, a firey blade, choose it but know its an expiring copy of death

Exis · 08-27-2013, 08:19 AM

Sickening addiction with thinking mixed in, its evil wizardry
Does it ever sink in? Emotional bickering mimicking weakness
Sleepless weekdays and weekends repeating itself in sequence

^^Liked it.

Chemical changes, general genetics rearranging wildly

^^Slick line.

I thought your flow was on and off, content also...sorta nice then not...I did like this however.What I quoted I really felt...and altho the rest was sorta iffy to me it wasn't bad by any means, all in all this was a good drop imo.

...Stay upwards man.

dead man · 08-27-2013, 06:09 PM

Ill drink to that!

CopyPat · 08-29-2013, 01:18 AM

i guess if its an actual key its not too bad. i wasn't really feeling this too much tho man, and i thought i would given the title. there was just nothing that really stood out here. kinda bland to me. no hate, just honest feed i just didn't see enough here

also when u said Satin did you mean Satan like the devil?? cause satin is material like cotton n shit haha

Natural · 08-29-2013, 01:47 AM

Yes, mispelling.
Word.

Mr. J · 08-29-2013, 02:49 PM

This was nice for a key the lyricism is here
but it needed more polish to be mind blowing
not taking away from it bit ypu know you could do better

08-27-2013, 02:04 AM	#1
Natural Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 659 Rep Power: 0	Alcohol Wizard (Key) Yes they're innocent memories, but I still kill em endlessly Liquid drizzlin drinking whiskey mesmorize the misery Sickening addiction with thinking mixed in, its evil wizardry Does it ever sink in? Emotional bickering mimicking weakness Sleepless weekdays and weekends repeating itself in sequence Feeding depression, depleting dopamine nueron firing frequence Chemical changes, general genetics rearranging wildly Some call it an alcoholic, science solves it as a disease evolving It don't matter the label, its sooner or later fatal, societal apalling Rock bottom gets lower every year, falling to a untitled teir I find myself crawling calling fear, to release me and disappear Satin sayin its stayin in attack formation to make an invasion here In my body, my temple, its rotting my mental focus, its naughty Corrosive to organs, dosing engorges the liver, poisoning problem Living and dying by the choices, I wish they would've wasted a breathe A curse, a firey blade, choose it but know its an expiring copy of death

08-27-2013, 06:09 PM	#3
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	Ill drink to that! __________________ Zack Wicks for president

08-29-2013, 01:18 AM	#4
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	i guess if its an actual key its not too bad. i wasn't really feeling this too much tho man, and i thought i would given the title. there was just nothing that really stood out here. kinda bland to me. no hate, just honest feed i just didn't see enough here also when u said Satin did you mean Satan like the devil?? cause satin is material like cotton n shit haha __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

08-29-2013, 02:49 PM	#6
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was nice for a key the lyricism is here but it needed more polish to be mind blowing not taking away from it bit ypu know you could do better __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

08-27-2013, 08:19 AM	#2
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Sickening addiction with thinking mixed in, its evil wizardry Does it ever sink in? Emotional bickering mimicking weakness Sleepless weekdays and weekends repeating itself in sequence ^^Liked it. Chemical changes, general genetics rearranging wildly ^^Slick line. I thought your flow was on and off, content also...sorta nice then not...I did like this however.What I quoted I really felt...and altho the rest was sorta iffy to me it wasn't bad by any means, all in all this was a good drop imo. ...Stay upwards man.

08-29-2013, 01:47 AM	#5
Natural Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 659 Rep Power: 0	Yes, mispelling. Word.