Shanghai Noon

ACTIVATE SELF · 06-28-2018, 11:25 PM

Eh

sral · 06-29-2018, 02:06 PM

You already posted this here I think?

ACTIVATE SELF · 06-29-2018, 02:39 PM

Kinda, but not really. I posted it. Then edited and deleted it before anybody actually read it.

Pharaohs Army · 07-03-2018, 12:40 AM

Oh you deleted it?

Well, from what I remember there were things I liked and disliked.

I very much liked the short lines and some of the good rhyming.

I didn't like a few phrases that were stretches. And just in general some poorer wording. I don't have examples right now because it's deleted.

It was okay you could put it back up.

06-29-2018, 02:06 PM	#2
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07-03-2018, 12:40 AM	#4
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Oh you deleted it? Well, from what I remember there were things I liked and disliked. I very much liked the short lines and some of the good rhyming. I didn't like a few phrases that were stretches. And just in general some poorer wording. I don't have examples right now because it's deleted. It was okay you could put it back up.