04-02-2018, 04:35 PM | #1 |
Lime Life
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Forever afraid
They say...
Life imitates art, but art is a reflection of life So I'll dance with this mirror and undress it tonight Deflecting the light....protecting the dark Poetry's impression in the depths of my heart Confession...alarms...the ringing of truth A cynic, aloof...but childlike and cautious A mind like a marsh, defined by this harness This cigarette smoke, the drunken haze I run the maze of those younger days Make Darryl Great Again...but was I ever great? Was there ever a time when I never prayed for better days? Maybe that's the pain...the facts, explained Pass the blame to the past, that's the way She taunts me, this hope, I see her in dreams I see her in sunsets, I see her in streams I see her tomorrow, but never today Today I just remember.... I remember the fact that I'm forever afraid.
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04-03-2018, 12:03 AM | #2 |
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This is really good shit.
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04-03-2018, 08:44 AM | #3 |
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Mire of a witty fan nowadays than before. Nice drop duke
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04-03-2018, 06:40 PM | #4 |
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This was like the Advanced Version of your previous piece. From the beginning to 'aloof' and from 'Pass the blame' to the end were note perfect. The second line and the 'I see her' section were my personal favorites. Really good. 'Childlike and cautious' was a lot of syllables for a hard rhyming transition after the beginning. My only complaint. Thanks for the read.
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