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Witty 04-02-2018 04:35 PM

Forever afraid
 
They say...

Life imitates art, but art is a reflection of life
So I'll dance with this mirror and undress it tonight
Deflecting the light....protecting the dark
Poetry's impression in the depths of my heart
Confession...alarms...the ringing of truth
A cynic, aloof...but childlike and cautious
A mind like a marsh, defined by this harness
This cigarette smoke, the drunken haze
I run the maze of those younger days
Make Darryl Great Again...but was I ever great?
Was there ever a time when I never prayed for better days?
Maybe that's the pain...the facts, explained
Pass the blame to the past, that's the way
She taunts me, this hope, I see her in dreams
I see her in sunsets, I see her in streams
I see her tomorrow, but never today
Today I just remember....
I remember the fact that I'm forever afraid.

dull boy 04-03-2018 12:03 AM

This is really good shit.

Geno 04-03-2018 08:44 AM

Mire of a witty fan nowadays than before. Nice drop duke

PancakeBrah 04-03-2018 06:40 PM

This was like the Advanced Version of your previous piece. From the beginning to 'aloof' and from 'Pass the blame' to the end were note perfect. The second line and the 'I see her' section were my personal favorites. Really good. 'Childlike and cautious' was a lot of syllables for a hard rhyming transition after the beginning. My only complaint. Thanks for the read.


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