new blog post - non-biblical resurrection of loved ones gone

[oats]

http://thefinitelife.com/2015/04/06/to-chase/


lmk what y'all think
@dead man @Certain @Dancake @uh-oh @Diode @Witty @Zen @UnbornBuddha @big baby @Pent uP @Genocide

[Hush]

Your single handedly killing this site, thanks alot bro.

[oats]

Originally Posted by Hush

Your single handedly killing this site, thanks alot bro.

por que? sure that wasn't meant for Genocide?

[Batty]

The work antivirus blocked that site as a phishing site.

I will peep it on the phone later bro.

[oats]

Originally Posted by Batty

The work antivirus blocked that site as a phishing site.

I will peep it on the phone later bro.

you're the second person who told me that, so odd. anyone know why that might be the case, or how I could prevent that? @Diode

[big baby]

Originally Posted by oats murkel

you're the second person who told me that, so odd. anyone know why that might be the case, or how I could prevent that? @Diode

stop being a FUCKA idiyote

[uh-oh]

hey oats i love you too BRO

[Mike Wrecka]

Originally Posted by oats murkel

http://thefinitelife.com/2015/04/06/to-chase/


lmk what y'all think
@dead man @Certain @Dancake @uh-oh @Diode @Witty @Zen @UnbornBuddha @big baby @Pent uP @Genocide

I suppose you want critique?


I thought it was well written. this part should have been restructured to omit the profanity , " someone just fucked up during the procedure". that doesn't add anything to the piece as a whole. it just reads juvenile and unprofessional tbh.

another thing that stood out was this


" Yet, as I sit here in my classroom across the ocean typing this, I can’t remember the last time I called, texted, or emailed any of them to say anything worthwhile."


followed by in the very next paragraph

"As I sit here, readying myself to go out later for a friend’s going away dinner, a thought juts into my mind."


man your writing on the move. but your sitting. lol . it comes off very disjointed. we really don't need to know where you are as these thoughts come into your consciousness. adding the locations here doesn't add anything to the subject so leave it out. and if your going to use it, don't use it twice. this was most likely an oversight.



besides that it was fairly boring. just a dear diary rant that had no point to it. you didn't use humor. which is ok. you didn't come to any interesting revelation. it was all rather bland tbh.


don't get me wrong it was well written overall. and its awesome that you are expanding your writing into other areas. keep it up.




I do wonder why you left a teaching gig to go teach English abroad. ive known people with high school diplomas that go and teach engilsh abroad. from what I understand they pay for room and board, and food and don't offer much of a salary at all.

[oats]

Thanks for the critique, Mike.

As far as teaching abroad, I've never heard of any country accepting less than a bachelors. Different counties pay differently, but if you want to know the particulars of Korea, I'll send you a pm. In short, I work less and make way more than I did in the states + no rent.

@uh-oh on my deathbed, assuming I have one, I will think briefly of my time on NC, and your persona will come to mind as I pass into the great unknown.