Paging Mr. Herman

Mr. J · 10-15-2014, 06:41 PM

Obviously I'm all about status quo within a magic show
with a rooster in their face, just so them other faggots know
I'm backed with growth, making me obese, fat & gross
while the smoke clears & it's all mirrors to this elaborate joke
I need a nicotine patch to smoke, tucked in a backward roll
belly flop on passive flows, wave by when they gag & choke
White, Black, or youth in Asia when the vets play active roles
came through when the rations low, but kept my jacket close
while y'all complain enough to fill a wine cellar in my Mansion home...
my mind palace, Sherlock & Moriarty when I'm lacking foes
left & right brain back & forth, Aaliyah's flight after the aftershow
before the curtains close, & I get higher than a giraffes' nose
I'm in another world, a Phantom's home, cursed to practice hope
while I got my tool on...puppet master too farfetched to catch or know...
if it's reality or not...Socrates Philosophy, a scientific anomaly
psychology couldn't grasp the entirety of what's wrong with me
...
..
Apologies, I base my ideas solely on Breaking Bad's properties
trying to find a balance on dramamine, with the ground mocking me
this is as easy as pi and this whole time I been Darren Aronofsky
the man behind the monarchy, with concubines and drama queens
probably overdoing it on 12's account way before the Mayan prophecies
I over saturated the game, became a well known name possibly
don't even talk to me, I'm a short fuse away from a kamikaze
these comics got me reflecting on the form they got from me...
Cash Rules Everything Around Me, CREAM and I apply it topically...
I dream demonic dreams and awake to a crucifix with the doc embalmin' me
reliving the robbery with a shot to the skull & Brad Pitt watching me

theMuzzl3 · 10-15-2014, 07:39 PM

Hope you enjoy this link (from your title, I figured you would).

I will read your piece and possibly post a response... at a quick glance, it looks very good.

AndyHiro · 10-15-2014, 08:04 PM

Mr J you are truly underrated. Much more artful and honest in your inner feelings than me in fact. I can telI that some of this came from a dark place inside you and if any of that came from my behavior I am sorry.

Window Taco · 10-16-2014, 12:18 AM

Highly entertaining with a deft skill level. I think it's goes without saying I enjoyed this. Your multis were great which made this a smooth read. The psychology was cool but could be expounded upon. Connectivity between lines was dope. And I like the subtle tie in to the joker.

Overall entertaining piece. I think you should enter a topical league or tourney.

Fav Line;

I'm backed with growth, making me obese, fat & gross
while the smoke clears & it's all mirrors to this elaborate joke

Mr. J · 10-16-2014, 02:26 AM

I'm feeling myself again

CopyPat · 10-16-2014, 03:37 PM

lol at feeling urself again

i liked this j. had a fast paced rhythm to it. flowed effortlessly for the most part. you didn't really say anything too crazy but it was just solid. wish it was a little longer but yeah other than that a couple good references, it was a pretty good little drop

Mr. J · 10-22-2014, 10:40 AM

Yeaaaa it could be

Malachi · 10-24-2014, 07:28 PM

This was cool, you flowed very nicely, thought you stayed on the same rhyme for awhile though but yea I enjoyed reading this. Don't think I've read anything from you but I liked your style.

10-15-2014, 06:41 PM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Paging Mr. Herman Obviously I'm all about status quo within a magic show with a rooster in their face, just so them other faggots know I'm backed with growth, making me obese, fat & gross while the smoke clears & it's all mirrors to this elaborate joke I need a nicotine patch to smoke, tucked in a backward roll belly flop on passive flows, wave by when they gag & choke White, Black, or youth in Asia when the vets play active roles came through when the rations low, but kept my jacket close while y'all complain enough to fill a wine cellar in my Mansion home... my mind palace, Sherlock & Moriarty when I'm lacking foes left & right brain back & forth, Aaliyah's flight after the aftershow before the curtains close, & I get higher than a giraffes' nose I'm in another world, a Phantom's home, cursed to practice hope while I got my tool on...puppet master too farfetched to catch or know... if it's reality or not...Socrates Philosophy, a scientific anomaly psychology couldn't grasp the entirety of what's wrong with me ... .. Apologies, I base my ideas solely on Breaking Bad's properties trying to find a balance on dramamine, with the ground mocking me this is as easy as pi and this whole time I been Darren Aronofsky the man behind the monarchy, with concubines and drama queens probably overdoing it on 12's account way before the Mayan prophecies I over saturated the game, became a well known name possibly don't even talk to me, I'm a short fuse away from a kamikaze these comics got me reflecting on the form they got from me... Cash Rules Everything Around Me, CREAM and I apply it topically... I dream demonic dreams and awake to a crucifix with the doc embalmin' me reliving the robbery with a shot to the skull & Brad Pitt watching me __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you Last edited by Mr. J; 10-17-2014 at 06:53 PM.

10-15-2014, 08:04 PM	#3
AndyHiro Yeah Im kinda like that Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 107 Rep Power: 0	Mr J you are truly underrated. Much more artful and honest in your inner feelings than me in fact. I can telI that some of this came from a dark place inside you and if any of that came from my behavior I am sorry. Last edited by AndyHiro; 10-15-2014 at 08:08 PM.

10-16-2014, 12:18 AM	#4
Window Taco can I help u? Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 236 Battle Record: 0-4 Rep Power: 888974	Highly entertaining with a deft skill level. I think it's goes without saying I enjoyed this. Your multis were great which made this a smooth read. The psychology was cool but could be expounded upon. Connectivity between lines was dope. And I like the subtle tie in to the joker. Overall entertaining piece. I think you should enter a topical league or tourney. Fav Line; I'm backed with growth, making me obese, fat & gross while the smoke clears & it's all mirrors to this elaborate joke __________________ aka windu tuako

10-16-2014, 02:26 AM	#5
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	I'm feeling myself again __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-16-2014, 03:37 PM	#6
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	lol at feeling urself again i liked this j. had a fast paced rhythm to it. flowed effortlessly for the most part. you didn't really say anything too crazy but it was just solid. wish it was a little longer but yeah other than that a couple good references, it was a pretty good little drop __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

10-22-2014, 10:40 AM	#7
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Yeaaaa it could be __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-24-2014, 07:28 PM	#8
Malachi Negus Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,529 Battle Record: 5-10 Champed - Newbie Tourney VI Rep Power: 82877410	This was cool, you flowed very nicely, thought you stayed on the same rhyme for awhile though but yea I enjoyed reading this. Don't think I've read anything from you but I liked your style. __________________ Seen the spectrum through the prisms