[TOPICAL] Trap vs. Split Eight - SPLIT WINS BY FORFEIT

PancakeBrah · 07-16-2013, 12:55 PM

Phone vote so no quotes. Trap I enjoyed your verse for the most part. Content was nice. But your structure and a few forced rhymes put me off. Split I'm more inclined to enjoy a verse styled like yours. A stream of ideas on the topic in a storm of punctuation and staccato reading. Some of your concepts and alliteration was stale to me. But there was some nice language and a couple standout ideas.

I like the essence/presence/repeated line from trap. Did not enjoy 'reap threats'. Did not like sentence/eyelids from split but put 'hate fizzles', 'mine did', 'debt' and the ender as positives.

Good read. Split gets my vote

07-16-2013, 12:55 PM	#13
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	Phone vote so no quotes. Trap I enjoyed your verse for the most part. Content was nice. But your structure and a few forced rhymes put me off. Split I'm more inclined to enjoy a verse styled like yours. A stream of ideas on the topic in a storm of punctuation and staccato reading. Some of your concepts and alliteration was stale to me. But there was some nice language and a couple standout ideas. I like the essence/presence/repeated line from trap. Did not enjoy 'reap threats'. Did not like sentence/eyelids from split but put 'hate fizzles', 'mine did', 'debt' and the ender as positives. Good read. Split gets my vote