Angel

Advocate · 06-28-2013, 01:32 AM

Enjoyable read for the most part! It wasn’t bad at all. Infact, I’m kinda curious to see how you would sound on an audio version. I feel like you show signs of creativity. I also like how you didn’t just stockpile words that ain’t even necessary half the time. I’m startin to see a pattern of that occur every once in awhile. So keep letting some of the words come to you instead, it would make it much smoother and somewhat easier to understand. I felt like your verse had good rhyming and was smooth for the most part. Hope to see more from you, you'll be hearin from me. Good job.

brokenhal0 · 06-28-2013, 03:00 AM

you have a gentle style its not hood but its nice comes off a little spoken wordish but your mind has a capacity to make it a enjoyable read

06-28-2013, 01:32 AM	#1
Advocate Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Location: Harlem, NY Posts: 57 Rep Power: 37	Enjoyable read for the most part! It wasn’t bad at all. Infact, I’m kinda curious to see how you would sound on an audio version. I feel like you show signs of creativity. I also like how you didn’t just stockpile words that ain’t even necessary half the time. I’m startin to see a pattern of that occur every once in awhile. So keep letting some of the words come to you instead, it would make it much smoother and somewhat easier to understand. I felt like your verse had good rhyming and was smooth for the most part. Hope to see more from you, you'll be hearin from me. Good job.

06-28-2013, 03:00 AM	#2
brokenhal0 Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 523 Battle Record: 12-12=4 Champed - AOWL Season IX Rep Power: 3891097	you have a gentle style its not hood but its nice comes off a little spoken wordish but your mind has a capacity to make it a enjoyable read