Twin Tourney Topical Division Round 1: Scar vs brokenhal0 - OPEN FOR VOTES!

Regulator · 12-04-2024, 03:21 PM

-I really loved your piece bh but I was kind of confused when you brought up scar, are you saying that you and scar are the dogs? I liked your approach even tho your opponent had better vocabulary than you, I preferred your story man t han scar, a few grammar issues in scar's peace also
or maybe it was stylistic? broken halo had a better finish the imagery was on pont, "my owner's laying dead near, an open refrigerator door" I can almost imagine the dog being so hungry that it had to eat the owner, while lying in its own feces. scar bh had twice the content you had, which was kind of your fault since you seen the content first, which would have been fine if your piece had enough substance to out match the content broken halo brought, and vice versa if broken had no substance then the length wouldn't really matter, so I'm still going with broken halo, had the longer piece but I was entertained throughout the story.

MVGT brokenhalo

12-04-2024, 03:21 PM	#9
Regulator Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2023 Posts: 349 Rep Power: 0	-I really loved your piece bh but I was kind of confused when you brought up scar, are you saying that you and scar are the dogs? I liked your approach even tho your opponent had better vocabulary than you, I preferred your story man t han scar, a few grammar issues in scar's peace also or maybe it was stylistic? broken halo had a better finish the imagery was on pont, "my owner's laying dead near, an open refrigerator door" I can almost imagine the dog being so hungry that it had to eat the owner, while lying in its own feces. scar bh had twice the content you had, which was kind of your fault since you seen the content first, which would have been fine if your piece had enough substance to out match the content broken halo brought, and vice versa if broken had no substance then the length wouldn't really matter, so I'm still going with broken halo, had the longer piece but I was entertained throughout the story. MVGT brokenhalo __________________ Champed - Art Of Writing League (1x)