Twin Tourney Topical Division Round 1: ACTIVATE SELF vs Regulator- OPEN FOR VOTES!

brokenhal0 · 12-03-2024, 12:14 AM

Activate - Tight rhyme schemes the writing style seemed a bit basic compared to some of your other work the pacing was on point the deeper aspect and flipping of the story was done with correct timing for the reader a child dreaming of a carnival yet waking on a death bed was perfectly executed with a nice sense of horror and shock that I prefer..

Regulator - At First this seemed like it was gonna be a better verse in terms of flow and writing but you left the bars too long and kind of killed the momentum and tension building for me after the first few bars i was already losing interest your opponent also played with the readers emotions a bit better...

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12-03-2024, 12:14 AM	#9
brokenhal0 Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 522 Battle Record: 12-12=4 Champed - AOWL Season IX Rep Power: 3891097	Activate - Tight rhyme schemes the writing style seemed a bit basic compared to some of your other work the pacing was on point the deeper aspect and flipping of the story was done with correct timing for the reader a child dreaming of a carnival yet waking on a death bed was perfectly executed with a nice sense of horror and shock that I prefer.. Regulator - At First this seemed like it was gonna be a better verse in terms of flow and writing but you left the bars too long and kind of killed the momentum and tension building for me after the first few bars i was already losing interest your opponent also played with the readers emotions a bit better... MGVT - Activate Self