deadman: who are you really?

Zen · 10-26-2024, 07:37 PM

so carefully, you only chose the prettiest blooms
as if he was alive to see whatever we used
^Good visual indicators here to paint a picture (which you’ve always excelled at) and the last line really says a lot about how we process loss. You’re great at finding those little phrases that create an impact in a few words. My favorite example of that in this piece is this line though:

your power is unshakable. my life is a joke
^i can’t explain why exactly I love this in words (which is ironic since we’re all writers). But a line like this is what separates good or mediocre writers from great ones, they can say all they need to in as few words as possible.

And without a doubt you are a great writer. One of the best I’ve seen, in fact.

Glad to see you’re still around and well, old friend. We may have to finally have that collab one of these days.

10-26-2024, 07:37 PM	#18
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	so carefully, you only chose the prettiest blooms as if he was alive to see whatever we used ^Good visual indicators here to paint a picture (which you’ve always excelled at) and the last line really says a lot about how we process loss. You’re great at finding those little phrases that create an impact in a few words. My favorite example of that in this piece is this line though: your power is unshakable. my life is a joke ^i can’t explain why exactly I love this in words (which is ironic since we’re all writers). But a line like this is what separates good or mediocre writers from great ones, they can say all they need to in as few words as possible. And without a doubt you are a great writer. One of the best I’ve seen, in fact. Glad to see you’re still around and well, old friend. We may have to finally have that collab one of these days.