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Old 12-22-2022, 10:41 PM   #4
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symetrik:
wow what a dope intro to a story very captive, the character development is off the chain.. the story progression itself was on fire.. i loved that it does appear to be homely like you said.. cool cool we just had a wild storm, it was a white xmas hail while in australia we dont really loved the quote.. your rhyming and vocab is strong.. i loved the loonies line to.. im loven the badge thing to dope.. this was soo good a 10/10 i hope you win i still gotta read the other verse g/l

Pharaohs Army:
dope love the disclaimer..
Unabashed theft: food, medical supplies, batteries & such
loved the imagery on this very descriptive and the and such was dope use of language..

i would say you are much more grown up language and literacy wise then sym but both are pretty decent.. im enjoying it..
i been seeing these looted super stores around but they seem to be keeping their shit together.. so they did came up alright in australia but it def did happen.. wow the actual factual pieces you placed in the last stanza was fire.. dope ending.. i love how you just explained that the looted super stores are natural if not in ukraine/russia and the end reveal was dope..

vote = Pharaohs Army

this was soo close it came down to substance and rhyme structure and it was blow for blow.. but personal preferance i like the substance style better
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