WEEK THIRTEEN: SOULÉ (0-1) vs FRANK (6-2) VS DEAD MAN (2-0) FRANKS WINS 4-2-0

NYCSPITZ · 07-21-2022, 07:43 AM

Fire battle

Soule I thought this was your best entry to date, the verse was mechanically smooth and flowed nicely, and included some slick turns of phrase that I didn’t expect from somebody who posts videos of themselves crying on youtube. More mature here, in a way…there were a few instances where I thought the wording could’ve been held together more smoothly but other than that it was a cool piece. Crustacean battle part reminds me of that new love death and robots episode. Atlantis odes and her psychic conundrum with having to kill, but being a sort of “peaceful warrior” at heart was dope to me. Great job.

Black came in and I think keystyled it, like some bars were like 5 words each for a brief section. Obviously it was still dope and you’re the best writer here I just think in a topical league you can do a better job imbuing the whole verse with the spirit of the topic. Like, can you do a black verse but make it like solely about elements in the picture? It is a topical after all, even thought your brain vomit is usually enough to win, would like to see how you do with a little more focus to the topic at hand, as others have mentioned

Frank I think I enjoyed your verse the most here. Soule was dope and had some ill shit like the elephant gracefully catching the malevolent cat, only you would say some shit like it was cold enough to freeze the balls of a brass monkey, lmao. Anyways the shit with babar, the elephant, tying it in with alexander and all that, even with all the -ly endings, I tried thought about it with creative license and I think topically I’ll have to give it to Frank. Came down to Soule & Frank, both were dope but I enjoyed frank’s more this time around.

Thanks fellas

V/ frank

07-21-2022, 07:43 AM	#11
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,031 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743547	Fire battle Soule I thought this was your best entry to date, the verse was mechanically smooth and flowed nicely, and included some slick turns of phrase that I didn’t expect from somebody who posts videos of themselves crying on youtube. More mature here, in a way…there were a few instances where I thought the wording could’ve been held together more smoothly but other than that it was a cool piece. Crustacean battle part reminds me of that new love death and robots episode. Atlantis odes and her psychic conundrum with having to kill, but being a sort of “peaceful warrior” at heart was dope to me. Great job. Black came in and I think keystyled it, like some bars were like 5 words each for a brief section. Obviously it was still dope and you’re the best writer here I just think in a topical league you can do a better job imbuing the whole verse with the spirit of the topic. Like, can you do a black verse but make it like solely about elements in the picture? It is a topical after all, even thought your brain vomit is usually enough to win, would like to see how you do with a little more focus to the topic at hand, as others have mentioned Frank I think I enjoyed your verse the most here. Soule was dope and had some ill shit like the elephant gracefully catching the malevolent cat, only you would say some shit like it was cold enough to freeze the balls of a brass monkey, lmao. Anyways the shit with babar, the elephant, tying it in with alexander and all that, even with all the -ly endings, I tried thought about it with creative license and I think topically I’ll have to give it to Frank. Came down to Soule & Frank, both were dope but I enjoyed frank’s more this time around. Thanks fellas V/ frank __________________ UNIFIED THEORY