WEEK TEN CHAMP MATCH: FRANK (4-1) vs EVICTION (7-1) FRANK WINS 5-0

Adverse · 06-19-2022, 09:50 AM

Eviction
This was a change in style for you completely, as you hadn’t really told many stories based on a third person’s point of view, nor have you really had a “topic” you’re more free form so seeing you base this in our reality and mentioning things like the Civil War and what not was crazy to me. I’m used to you being more free flowing in your work, and you did have that here where you were almost rambling and it works in your usual pieces but I think all having the topic did for you was anchor you to it and not allow you to move about in your usual way. There were some cool bits here and the overall story was alright just seemed to miss the same Mark your pieces usually hit.

Frank
This is our first verse about climate change this season which surprises me lol I liked that that’s what you took from the topic picture. This was a hard one to interpret it without being too on the nose about it but I think you guys handled that well. This was your usual Frank piece but I feel like it was superior to what you posted last week, that story pretty much wrote itself in circle but I liked the progression of your narrative here m. The imagery was awesome, the alliteration, the flow were all impeccable. When you’re firing on all cylinders like this it would be hard for anyone to overcome it. It’s just technical mastery and you’re one of the very few that can bring it week in and week out.

Overall Eviction wasn’t bad this week he just had a couple of missteps and was completely overpowered by the vet

V/Frank

06-19-2022, 09:50 AM	#7
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	Eviction This was a change in style for you completely, as you hadn’t really told many stories based on a third person’s point of view, nor have you really had a “topic” you’re more free form so seeing you base this in our reality and mentioning things like the Civil War and what not was crazy to me. I’m used to you being more free flowing in your work, and you did have that here where you were almost rambling and it works in your usual pieces but I think all having the topic did for you was anchor you to it and not allow you to move about in your usual way. There were some cool bits here and the overall story was alright just seemed to miss the same Mark your pieces usually hit. Frank This is our first verse about climate change this season which surprises me lol I liked that that’s what you took from the topic picture. This was a hard one to interpret it without being too on the nose about it but I think you guys handled that well. This was your usual Frank piece but I feel like it was superior to what you posted last week, that story pretty much wrote itself in circle but I liked the progression of your narrative here m. The imagery was awesome, the alliteration, the flow were all impeccable. When you’re firing on all cylinders like this it would be hard for anyone to overcome it. It’s just technical mastery and you’re one of the very few that can bring it week in and week out. Overall Eviction wasn’t bad this week he just had a couple of missteps and was completely overpowered by the vet V/Frank