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Rules Line limit Minimum: 10 Maximum: 16 Verses due 11:59pm EST November 19, 2020 (Thursday) Extensions are granted automatically. 24-hour max. MUST BE REQUESTED BY DEADLINE Good luck, gentlemen |
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I’m going 16. Feel free to drop however many you’d like.
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What part of dropping 16 didn’t you understand?
Fine. I get it. I’m scary to most… You should have scrapped that WHOLE verse; Not just the two lines you were too embarrassed to post. Your entire drop was a shank. Put your loss in the bank…. This peasant’s not a ‘stone’s throw from power.’ He’s tossing rocks at a tank. I pull rank with legends. It’s true… You only ‘pull rank’ when you fall in love with busted strippers that pretend to dig you. I beat down street urchins like.. Shit. I got nothin’ better to do… Son… your family’s broken-down camel spits better than you. Every drop of mine brings impossible violence… I’m the peak of evolution. You stopped at the Galapagos Islands. Your name’s ironic… So, you don’t dare disparage; You’re a less ‘destructive spirit’ than the one your Dad drank to kill your parents’ marriage. I roll solo; you can’t attack with an army…. The judges will ‘hit the Belfast’ in this battle harder than an Irish bachelor party. Peace.
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Ahriman verse:
Ajax aka Eyeaxe aka Adonis aka brutally lost to Orc How they Mold you “elite”? but you’ll Die by a noob Saw Orchil this lame, get use to voters not taking Lichen of you Jax swamped in bills, this Bird your dome you’ll drop quick I get Caught surrounded by Bills, celebrating wins more than DeAndre Hopkins Fuck this idiots face up & Surround the geek with nurses Leaving Eyesore, but not as bad as when we read his verses I beat ur wife pussy till divorce talks is hittin this dude Love how your Extend to sit on this Long Ride, but won’t walk the Distance with you UPN faggots hold no weight. In seconds this dude is slapped This glock put Jax in a Bag & that ain’t one of Users Snacks One bullet’ll stretch that Attention Span! Die you soft bitch Either it’s 1 shot in Aderal rounds will mess this kid up more than a science Project Grab your throat & punch your face till they don’t think your well I killed Jax In Five, & they won’t hear him sing for help |
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Ajax
Your entire drop was a shank. Put your loss in the bank…. This peasant’s not a ‘stone’s throw from power.’ He’s tossing rocks at a tank. I pull rank with legends. It’s true… You only ‘pull rank’ when you fall in love with busted strippers that pretend to dig you. Every drop of mine brings impossible violence… I’m the peak of evolution. You stopped at the Galapagos Islands. Opener is stretched, and lacking something Spits & belfast been done a lot Pull rank is LOTB Ahri Fuck this idiots face up & Surround the geek with nurses Leaving Eyesore, but not as bad as when we read his verses UPN faggots hold no weight. In seconds this dude is slapped This glock put Jax in a Bag & that ain’t one of Users Snacks Jax in 5 had so much potential The rest of your verse was random wordplay thrown in/not making sense Cool read Voting Ajax Last edited by Scout; 11-18-2020 at 06:12 PM. |
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Ahriman's jackson 5 closer was cool, walk the distance was ok. I got thrown off by your wording on a lot of the bars. Wordplay flips don't work for me unless worded well (Orchil, Aderal, Eyesore). Vote: Ajax nice showing from both but going with ajax for better wording/concepts |
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Ajax wins
Most lines were good to bang level. Felt the last four especially Other dude wasnt bad. Just nothing that really stood out good or bad
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AJAX
I get it. I’m scary to most… You should have scrapped that WHOLE verse; Not just the two lines you were too embarrassed to post. Decent opener Your entire drop was a shank. Put your loss in the bank…. This peasant’s not a ‘stone’s throw from power.’ He’s tossing rocks at a tank. I've never seen that idiom, but good bar I pull rank with legends. It’s true… You only ‘pull rank’ when you fall in love with busted strippers that pretend to dig you. Ok I beat down street urchins like.. Shit. I got nothin’ better to do… Son… your family’s broken-down camel spits better than you. Basic Every drop of mine brings impossible violence… I’m the peak of evolution. You stopped at the Galapagos Islands. Wasn't feeling Your name’s ironic… So, you don’t dare disparage; You’re a less ‘destructive spirit’ than the one your Dad drank to kill your parents’ marriage. Good I roll solo; you can’t attack with an army…. The judges will ‘hit the Belfast’ in this battle harder than an Irish bachelor party. Ok closer This 'short & sweet' writing style works, but the risk is some bars can come off too basic. You were still pretty consistent. Good stuff 6.5/10 VS AHRIMAN How they Mold you “elite”? but you’ll Die by a noob Saw Orchil this lame, get use to voters not taking Lichen of you Major points for creativity here, but its almost trying to do so much it backfired Jax swamped in bills, this Bird your dome you’ll drop quick I get Caught surrounded by Bills, celebrating wins more than DeAndre Hopkins This wasn't much of a diss and your random capitalized words annoy me. Fuck this idiots face up & Surround the geek with nurses Leaving Eyesore, but not as bad as when we read his verses Pretty sure "leaving eyesore" doesn't work as a phrase or idiom or sentence or continuance on its own, which ruins the punch. I beat ur wife pussy till divorce talks is hittin this dude Love how your Extend to sit on this Long Ride, but won’t walk the Distance with you Isn't 'walking the distance' getting married? If so, this didn't work how you intended. Decently creative though UPN faggots hold no weight. In seconds this dude is slapped This glock put Jax in a Bag & that ain’t one of Users Snacks Disses user more than ajax One bullet’ll stretch that Attention Span! Die you soft bitch Either it’s 1 shot in Aderal rounds will mess this kid up more than a science Project meh....? You mean adderall? This is a mess Grab your throat & punch your face till they don’t think your well I killed Jax In Five, & they won’t hear him sing for help Ok closer You had a ton of wp, which is a good thing, but the execution was lacking. 5/10 Your entire drop was a shank. Put your loss in the bank…. This peasant’s not a ‘stone’s throw from power.’ He’s tossing rocks at a tank. Your name’s ironic… So, you don’t dare disparage; You’re a less ‘destructive spirit’ than the one your Dad drank to kill your parents’ marriage. VS How they Mold you “elite”? but you’ll Die by a noob Saw Orchil this lame, get use to voters not taking Lichen of you Vote: Ajax |
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I get it. I’m scary to most…
You should have scrapped that WHOLE verse; Not just the two lines you were too embarrassed to post. Your entire drop was a shank. Put your loss in the bank…. This peasant’s not a ‘stone’s throw from power.’ He’s tossing rocks at a tank. I beat down street urchins like.. Shit. I got nothin’ better to do… Son… your family’s broken-down camel spits better than you. Every drop of mine brings impossible violence… I’m the peak of evolution. You stopped at the Galapagos Islands. Your name’s ironic… So, you don’t dare disparage; You’re a less ‘destructive spirit’ than the one your Dad drank to kill your parents’ marriage. vs. Fuck this idiots face up & Surround the geek with nurses Leaving Eyesore, but not as bad as when we read his verses Grab your throat & punch your face till they don’t think your well I killed Jax In Five, & they won’t hear him sing for help v/ajax. I was going to quote the hopkins bar for ahriman but fam he's with the cards now. I think ajax came w/more than enough for the dub.
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Ajax
Honestly I could quote most if not the whole verse Standouts were stones throw, Galapagos and destructive spirit. Everything else is decent. Only one I wasn’t overly keen on was camel spit. Good shit Ahriman Eyesore was cool A few of your other bars had potential.. like the ideas weren’t bad you just need to work on the wording / execution Voting Ajax here |
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