GWL PLAYOFFS ROUND 1- #4 UNIVERSE (7-3) VS #9 RAZAH (0-0) UNIVERSE WINS/OPEN FOR FEED

Inno · 07-25-2020, 08:01 PM

UNI

You know I would say that it’s a big stake as well but honestly I think people are focusing on a small part to your verse. The shock value aspect of it shouldn’t be the vocal point. I thought the overall message of when given a chance, people will do what they truly desire. No matter what it could be. In this case weird sex lol. I dug it man it was dope piece that read a little more relaxed than what you usually right. And like I said I liked how you wove the message into your story.

Razah

Ok so this a dope piece aswell. You started off on fire and kept it going pretty good through out the verse. I think you took the same route UNI did just in a different path line if that makes sense. I enjoyed the way you made the verse with direct tone. It worked for what you wrote. The only thing that maybe it’s just me being picky but for me atleast toward the middle you asked a lot of questions or wrote in question form. Which I thought was cool for bit. I think if you would asked those questions spread out instead one after the other, would make them hit stronger. Overall though i thought the last half of your verse was the best part of the verse.

Overall

This is a tough one but I think I’m going with UNI on this simply because I liked how he delivered his message. Slightly edging Razah in this one. Def a dope match and thanks for the read fellas.

Uni

07-25-2020, 08:01 PM	#11
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,025 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	UNI You know I would say that it’s a big stake as well but honestly I think people are focusing on a small part to your verse. The shock value aspect of it shouldn’t be the vocal point. I thought the overall message of when given a chance, people will do what they truly desire. No matter what it could be. In this case weird sex lol. I dug it man it was dope piece that read a little more relaxed than what you usually right. And like I said I liked how you wove the message into your story. Razah Ok so this a dope piece aswell. You started off on fire and kept it going pretty good through out the verse. I think you took the same route UNI did just in a different path line if that makes sense. I enjoyed the way you made the verse with direct tone. It worked for what you wrote. The only thing that maybe it’s just me being picky but for me atleast toward the middle you asked a lot of questions or wrote in question form. Which I thought was cool for bit. I think if you would asked those questions spread out instead one after the other, would make them hit stronger. Overall though i thought the last half of your verse was the best part of the verse. Overall This is a tough one but I think I’m going with UNI on this simply because I liked how he delivered his message. Slightly edging Razah in this one. Def a dope match and thanks for the read fellas. Uni