GWL PLAYOFFS ROUND 1- #4 UNIVERSE (7-3) VS #9 RAZAH (0-0) UNIVERSE WINS/OPEN FOR FEED

Scar · 07-25-2020, 02:36 PM

i enjoyed this battle. it was a stylistic clash to me. pure storytelling vs pure topical.

uni, this had many of your trademarks. the visceral/deviant nature of it, sexual desire, whether taboo or not seems to be a recurring theme with a few of your work. what i really like about this one was how it tied to the topic. It was really cool. you told a story and peruse the philosophical layer of it all while displaying the wordplays that's synonymous of your style lulz. However, i will have to echo other's issue in that i've seen this stuff before from you. Granted, it was a clever tie-in with the topic but its not necessarily outside of any comfort zone you know? nonetheless, this was an engaging final product.

razah, lots of super cool verbiage and ideas here. the scar line was awesome - no not because it had my name in it but the idea was cool. as too was the clay line. As a topical, this was pretty cool. and i love how you chose to dissect the topic head on. Ultimately it seems to discuss our innate urges and that if we are of god's image, maybe he has these quality as well. Super interesting verse that i really enjoyed.

I honestly felt the techniques were pretty much on par. The concepts were both engaging. One chose to dive head first into the topic, the other used traditional narration to illustrate and discuss the topic. man, this is hard.

ok, so after thinking it a few times over, i think i will go with Universe only because not only was his story engaging (albeit cliche in according to his topical choice), it was still able to incorporate the topic in a very cool way. Razah, was more a philosophical musing that although very interesting, didnt have that extra umph in it. I can honestly say that it was a very close bout to me.

v/Universe

07-25-2020, 02:36 PM	#10
Scar Senior Member Join Date: May 2019 Posts: 566 Battle Record: 7-5 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League Rep Power: 5689709	i enjoyed this battle. it was a stylistic clash to me. pure storytelling vs pure topical. uni, this had many of your trademarks. the visceral/deviant nature of it, sexual desire, whether taboo or not seems to be a recurring theme with a few of your work. what i really like about this one was how it tied to the topic. It was really cool. you told a story and peruse the philosophical layer of it all while displaying the wordplays that's synonymous of your style lulz. However, i will have to echo other's issue in that i've seen this stuff before from you. Granted, it was a clever tie-in with the topic but its not necessarily outside of any comfort zone you know? nonetheless, this was an engaging final product. razah, lots of super cool verbiage and ideas here. the scar line was awesome - no not because it had my name in it but the idea was cool. as too was the clay line. As a topical, this was pretty cool. and i love how you chose to dissect the topic head on. Ultimately it seems to discuss our innate urges and that if we are of god's image, maybe he has these quality as well. Super interesting verse that i really enjoyed. I honestly felt the techniques were pretty much on par. The concepts were both engaging. One chose to dive head first into the topic, the other used traditional narration to illustrate and discuss the topic. man, this is hard. ok, so after thinking it a few times over, i think i will go with Universe only because not only was his story engaging (albeit cliche in according to his topical choice), it was still able to incorporate the topic in a very cool way. Razah, was more a philosophical musing that although very interesting, didnt have that extra umph in it. I can honestly say that it was a very close bout to me. v/Universe __________________ I remember the poplar trees