WEEK 11: Pharaohs army (2-3) (signed out) vs brokenhal0 (1-5) OPEN FOR FEED

Johnny 6 feet · 06-28-2020, 06:06 PM

A montage of intense imagery here that connected well with the topic and make think your record deserves to be higher. It's a shame the battles got misposted because I would've liked to have seen this go against someone tackling the same topic. You brought a poetic vibe and structure here:

'stale pizza on the table ashes on the paint floor
a bird with no wings singing in the cave moss'

Best lines IMO. Vivid. I'm looking forward to what you come up with next week.

06-28-2020, 06:06 PM	#1
Johnny 6 feet Storyteller Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 446 Battle Record: 8-4 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League Rep Power: 5558447	A montage of intense imagery here that connected well with the topic and make think your record deserves to be higher. It's a shame the battles got misposted because I would've liked to have seen this go against someone tackling the same topic. You brought a poetic vibe and structure here: 'stale pizza on the table ashes on the paint floor a bird with no wings singing in the cave moss' Best lines IMO. Vivid. I'm looking forward to what you come up with next week.