WEEK 9 CHAMP MATCH: Clutbuck vs Bodey BODEY FORFEITS, OPEN FOR FEED

Vulgar · 05-29-2020, 11:53 PM

Lars that was really good, you pulled it off swimmingly. Longer lines than usual which harkens back to your earlier Baron Mynd days, i think i remember you used the centered text format? Nice work with the puns. The rhyming, like your chicken verse a few weeks ago, was very skilled.

"A cheap pop within earshot of her eavesdropping could lead on into real problems.
Keep conscious of accepting your wrong.
You’ll lose your voice tryna prove a point; and never get it across with your head bitten off."

That was suave!

This was well done. Good work, would've been tough to 'beat'. I wonder how you would fare in terms of writing non-rhyming short stories. It might be a good change of pace to do it on the side, where it's more about the story and less about the rhyme/flare/flips... just my thought. I know you take pride in this medium.

Take care and thx for read

05-29-2020, 11:53 PM	#7
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Lars that was really good, you pulled it off swimmingly. Longer lines than usual which harkens back to your earlier Baron Mynd days, i think i remember you used the centered text format? Nice work with the puns. The rhyming, like your chicken verse a few weeks ago, was very skilled. "A cheap pop within earshot of her eavesdropping could lead on into real problems. Keep conscious of accepting your wrong. You’ll lose your voice tryna prove a point; and never get it across with your head bitten off." That was suave! This was well done. Good work, would've been tough to 'beat'. I wonder how you would fare in terms of writing non-rhyming short stories. It might be a good change of pace to do it on the side, where it's more about the story and less about the rhyme/flare/flips... just my thought. I know you take pride in this medium. Take care and thx for read