Week 5: Champ Match: Clutbuck vs Universe [UNIVERSE WINS VIA DQ]

Pharaohs Army · 04-26-2020, 02:27 AM

Don't really feel like giving a vote on this one (again). As I could go either way at the moment.

Universe
Technically sound and good storytelling. A little trite with the ol' "off my meds, imagined it all" angle. Truth be told, I enjoyed your sidestory of the car crash better than the whole plot and entity; why? Couldn't tell you. I'll try. The rhymes and the detail of the car part just caught my attention.

I find it interesting that Universe's piece was more about Envy and Diablo's was about greed. I thought they were two separate sins but based on the setup page it appears I'm probably wrong?

Diablo
Also technically sound and good storytelling. I guess I'm not the only one who noticed undercurrents of a metaphor relating to your opponent's plan to take the crown. Could be imagined but I saw some evidence there of that.
The story itself is rather simple, greedy farmer, but told eloquently.

I'm not enamored with Universe's over use of shocking moments (beheadings rapes suicides), so if anything that takes away from him when it comes to my personal opinion. Despite this, his story kept me a little more engaged whereas the goose story was just the slightest bit bland, despite the technical proficiency.

So I edge this to Universe

And no one should be DQd or forfeited IMO

04-26-2020, 02:27 AM	#12
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Don't really feel like giving a vote on this one (again). As I could go either way at the moment. Universe Technically sound and good storytelling. A little trite with the ol' "off my meds, imagined it all" angle. Truth be told, I enjoyed your sidestory of the car crash better than the whole plot and entity; why? Couldn't tell you. I'll try. The rhymes and the detail of the car part just caught my attention. I find it interesting that Universe's piece was more about Envy and Diablo's was about greed. I thought they were two separate sins but based on the setup page it appears I'm probably wrong? Diablo Also technically sound and good storytelling. I guess I'm not the only one who noticed undercurrents of a metaphor relating to your opponent's plan to take the crown. Could be imagined but I saw some evidence there of that. The story itself is rather simple, greedy farmer, but told eloquently. I'm not enamored with Universe's over use of shocking moments (beheadings rapes suicides), so if anything that takes away from him when it comes to my personal opinion. Despite this, his story kept me a little more engaged whereas the goose story was just the slightest bit bland, despite the technical proficiency. So I edge this to Universe And no one should be DQd or forfeited IMO