Jokes

Diablo · 01-30-2020, 05:41 PM

I wasn’t so sure on the wording of ‘rarest of sub-waste’ but I did find the scheme to my liking. I enjoy seeing people toy with words in this way, it has an almost stream-of-consciousness feel to it. The development unfolds naturally, even if some of the wording doesn’t feel that way here, but I think you have a strong grasp on the mechanics behind what you’re doing and it’s now more a case of you building on that foundation you have and honing your skill set to elevate your writing even further. The second verse, in particular, read a lot more naturally and that gave it a fluidity reminiscent of Certain, very high calibre writing indeed. This is probably the best I’ve read by you.

Keep that pen moving!

01-30-2020, 05:41 PM	#1
Diablo Badgerdick Join Date: Jul 2015 Location: Showdown City Posts: 2,633 Battle Record: 11-2 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 22685552	I wasn’t so sure on the wording of ‘rarest of sub-waste’ but I did find the scheme to my liking. I enjoy seeing people toy with words in this way, it has an almost stream-of-consciousness feel to it. The development unfolds naturally, even if some of the wording doesn’t feel that way here, but I think you have a strong grasp on the mechanics behind what you’re doing and it’s now more a case of you building on that foundation you have and honing your skill set to elevate your writing even further. The second verse, in particular, read a lot more naturally and that gave it a fluidity reminiscent of Certain, very high calibre writing indeed. This is probably the best I’ve read by you. Keep that pen moving!