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12-08-2019, 04:24 PM
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This is really good. That manic kid/camping in a breeze part was just great. You made it feel relatable throughout and kept it authentic while doing so. Wasn't really fond of one line with that squashed ceilings comparison but at least it was descriptive. Also, glad you're doing better.
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