Cashius vs Brokenhal0[OPEN]

Crash Carson · 06-29-2019, 03:30 AM

Broken halo. Not much memorable here. The roseann was ok. That wayheminem idk if that's supposed to be kamehaha but that was pretty bad. Your structure needs some tweaking also, didn't help the flow. Closing line was a jab and the miss piggy man bun line had something going. Keep at it and use more of your time.

Cassius. Wtf. Probably only 'bad' bar was the broken bone. It was better than each line. The vertabraye halo disc. Fuck he ain't cumin back. The opener does actually seem a little weaker but it works good. Good use of wordplays and multis just overall dope. The 10/16 set up punch man you got a lot out of that one. Somebody really wanted to win, or send a message, either way mission accomplished.

Vote - Cashius

06-29-2019, 03:30 AM	#8
Crash Carson Wreckin em Join Date: Jun 2019 Location: TN Posts: 69 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	Broken halo. Not much memorable here. The roseann was ok. That wayheminem idk if that's supposed to be kamehaha but that was pretty bad. Your structure needs some tweaking also, didn't help the flow. Closing line was a jab and the miss piggy man bun line had something going. Keep at it and use more of your time. Cassius. Wtf. Probably only 'bad' bar was the broken bone. It was better than each line. The vertabraye halo disc. Fuck he ain't cumin back. The opener does actually seem a little weaker but it works good. Good use of wordplays and multis just overall dope. The 10/16 set up punch man you got a lot out of that one. Somebody really wanted to win, or send a message, either way mission accomplished. Vote - Cashius __________________