Time's Up

[Lars]

Originally Posted by Nigma

I feel only the people who take the time to really appreciate how exactly he has mimicked the rhyme scheme in that verse will truly appreciate what he did here. It's kinda hard to be listening to dudes scheme in the song and read Pats lyrics simultaneously but with some pausing and reading you can understand that anything apparently absent in Pats flow is missing for this reason.

For this reason, I thought this was a very ambitious concept idea, and that you pulled it off flawlessly. Not only in terms of the scheme but with the message of the verse as well. This was a fresh read Pat, gooooood shit.

I actually agree with a lot of what Nigma said, BUT, I fucking hate that you did this. I don't like it, at all. I mean... For someone new in the game, trying to learn how to scheme and what have you maybe, I could see them attempting a few of these to find that rhyme placement and to fully understand what it is the rapper (OC in this case) is doing, but for someone like you? Hell nah. I just don't get it. I mean, I can understand you attempting to pull off the same rhyme scheme but the actual content in yours suffers SO much for that to happen that it just doesn't seem worth it. You really sacrificed your content for his scheme/flow. I dunno man, some dudes here seem scared to say what they like and don't on some Emperor's New Clothes shit because they know how good you are - but i'm a million percent real and will keep it one hunnid with you at all times cuzzo.

This wasn't for me at all. As a lyrical exercise to test yourselves to see if you can do it, I say do but keep it in your own notepads, as a standalone text piece? Steer well clear of posting these.



I'm not a fan.