Time's Up

[CopyPat]

I posted this a while back on old netcees. I don't think people really got what i was tryin to do tho.. haha

Anyways here's the actual classic track by O.C. :


I basically rewrote it with totally different lyrics but kept the exact same rhyme scheme and pretty much rhymed the whole song word for word.. you'll see what I mean if u listen to the track while reading my verses



You lack the syllables and sciences, stylin that I’m rhymin with
Fuck who that I offend, rappers sit back I’m bout to begin
Bout how soft you talk, sweet like chocolate sauce
More less the methods are in question, never been aggressive
My lyrics will manifest anything that’s raw worth a verse about
All told purposely, never blurted out
What’s in the future for stupid entertainers? Rappers are in danger
Who will resist when I’m the changer?
When the spit flies and sprays, to blow you outta the game
Some will keep their ignorance, and some will be saved
The same suckers with they asses out
Really it stinks, cause your shit and I ain’t down with the crap
That you be drippin, the honest flowa
Rappin the best and I know I’m dope-a
Real rhymes sucka, the repercussions might choke ya
Always pity you clowns
Verses blatantly rotten, what you consider as sickness
To me this is just a clinic
I feel I own, not cause I taught the way to crap talk
The more emotion I put into it the harder I rock
Those who flow miserable, I really ain’t feelin you

Their time’s limited, hard rocks too
Their time’s limited, hard rocks too

Legally dumb, about how much you sick but you never won it
I’m in it to win it, the best man to lay tracks and spit this flyness
I find it the finest. Cause each verse is strategized
The most tightest out bust the average guys
I’m fed up with the bull, on this focus of penis dicks
And cocks gettin jocked, and that’s just bein a bitch
It’s the same old same old, gay vote on the table
The long texts are not hot yet or fresh
So why you pushin it?
Why you rhyming for? You know when you spit
You know you choke, you just a dud and you miss
Your façades a problem
That you rely on in rhyme duels and rapping spats
You post horrible threats relax
What’s her face told me she rocked a spit last week at the bar
That’s a lie.. it wasn’t her in the song
See i know ho’s, I go to shows, images is blown
Guys be rappin, I begin all laughin.. just a joke
Of course I got up and left, the honeys were vexed, but uhhh
I’de rather be dope then have a whole lot of this sex
It’s the principle of it, I get enough of these sluts
With both thighs open, and baby ya body is smoke
That’s why I’m considered real in this field I do it
My head is puttin brain cells to work creatin’ music
Non-professional, Ya’ll is vegetables
Everybody’s either rhyme sedated or technical
I’m here to save the business, and rhyme all with sickness
To tracks I’m off rippin, rappin all different
For those who flow miserable, I really ain’t feelin you

Their time’s limited, hard rocks too
Their time’s limited, hard rocks too

[Just Write]

Originally Posted by CopyPat

I posted this a while back on old netcees. I don't think people really got what i was tryin to do tho.. haha





You lack the syllables and sciences, stylin that I’m rhymin with
Fuck who that I offend, rappers sit back I’m bout to begin

the fuck who that i offend part kinda stuck out to me as in didnt flow as well as im used to from you

Bout how soft you talk, sweet like chocolate sauce
More less the methods are in question, never been aggressive
My lyrics will manifest anything that’s raw worth a verse about
All told purposely, never blurted out

lol@chocolate sauce.. liked this last line too

What’s in the future for stupid entertainers? Rappers are in danger
Who will resist when I’m the changer?
When the spit flies and sprays, to blow you outta the game
Some will keep their ignorance, and some will be saved
The same suckers with they asses out
Really it stinks, cause your shit and I ain’t down with the crap
That you be drippin, the honest flowa
Rappin the best and I know I’m dope-a


i liked this part up until the aint down with crap line, it just didnt flow to me

Real rhymes sucka, the repercussions might choke ya
Always pity you clowns
Verses blatantly rotten, what you consider as sickness
To me this is just a clinic
I feel I own, not cause I taught the way to crap talk
The more emotion I put into it the harder I rock
Those who flow miserable, I really ain’t feelin you

Their time’s limited, hard rocks too
Their time’s limited, hard rocks too


you ended that verse nicely, dug it

Legally dumb, about how much you sick but you never won it
I’m in it to win it, the best man to lay tracks and spit this flyness
I find it the finest. Cause each verse is strategized
The most tightest out bust the average guys
I’m fed up with the bull, on this focus of penis dicks
And cocks gettin jocked, and that’s just bein a bitch

i reeaally enjoyed this part fam


It’s the same old same old, gay vote on the table
The long texts are not hot yet or fresh
So why you pushin it?
Why you rhyming for? You know when you spit
You know you choke, you just a dud and you miss
Your façades a problem
That you rely on in rhyme duels and rapping spats
You post horrible threats relax

eh, this was ok, just not up to par with your usual

What’s her face told me she rocked a spit last week at the bar
That’s a lie.. it wasn’t her in the song
See i know ho’s, I go to shows, images is blown
Guys be rappin, I begin all laughin.. just a joke
Of course I got up and left, the honeys were vexed, but uhhh
I’de rather be dope then have a whole lot of this sex

nah nigga, sex is important lol


It’s the principle of it, I get enough of these sluts
With both thighs open, and baby ya body is smoke
That’s why I’m considered real in this field I do it
My head is puttin brain cells to work creatin’ music

dope

Non-professional, Ya’ll is vegetables
Everybody’s either rhyme sedated or technical
I’m here to save the business, and rhyme all with sickness
To tracks I’m off rippin, rappin all different
For those who flow miserable, I really ain’t feelin you


solid closer

ok so i did enjoy this but i do not think it was up to standards with what i typically see from you flow was, i know i put a lot of emphasis on flow here but thats only because you've set a point in your previous pieces that im accustomed to, but i did enjoy this and feel its being slept on, peace

[CopyPat]

haha thanks for the read j dub. not to be an asshole but yeah it didn't flow my usual style cause i took o.c's track and seriously used his exact rhyme scheme for the whole song but just changed the lyrics. u have to listen to his song (or already know it) While reading mine to really get why i did it this way. if u don't know this song this will be wack to u hahaha

[Dope girl]

you had some dope lines & nice ones. work on your flow.

[Vulgar]

I nominate this for HOF.

[Nigma]

I feel only the people who take the time to really appreciate how exactly he has mimicked the rhyme scheme in that verse will truly appreciate what he did here. It's kinda hard to be listening to dudes scheme in the song and read Pats lyrics simultaneously but with some pausing and reading you can understand that anything apparently absent in Pats flow is missing for this reason.

For this reason, I thought this was a very ambitious concept idea, and that you pulled it off flawlessly. Not only in terms of the scheme but with the message of the verse as well. This was a fresh read Pat, gooooood shit.

[Loose Logic]

I like what you did here .. trying to follow his schemes and phrasing while using different wording.. seemed to work out .. some cool parts.. keep droppin..

[Lars]

Originally Posted by Nigma

I feel only the people who take the time to really appreciate how exactly he has mimicked the rhyme scheme in that verse will truly appreciate what he did here. It's kinda hard to be listening to dudes scheme in the song and read Pats lyrics simultaneously but with some pausing and reading you can understand that anything apparently absent in Pats flow is missing for this reason.

For this reason, I thought this was a very ambitious concept idea, and that you pulled it off flawlessly. Not only in terms of the scheme but with the message of the verse as well. This was a fresh read Pat, gooooood shit.

I actually agree with a lot of what Nigma said, BUT, I fucking hate that you did this. I don't like it, at all. I mean... For someone new in the game, trying to learn how to scheme and what have you maybe, I could see them attempting a few of these to find that rhyme placement and to fully understand what it is the rapper (OC in this case) is doing, but for someone like you? Hell nah. I just don't get it. I mean, I can understand you attempting to pull off the same rhyme scheme but the actual content in yours suffers SO much for that to happen that it just doesn't seem worth it. You really sacrificed your content for his scheme/flow. I dunno man, some dudes here seem scared to say what they like and don't on some Emperor's New Clothes shit because they know how good you are - but i'm a million percent real and will keep it one hunnid with you at all times cuzzo.

This wasn't for me at all. As a lyrical exercise to test yourselves to see if you can do it, I say do but keep it in your own notepads, as a standalone text piece? Steer well clear of posting these.



I'm not a fan.