A Daughter's Farewell...Part II.

Pharaohs Army · 06-08-2018, 08:03 PM

Sorry, but I seem to remember (a long time ago) reading a 16 from you where you had perfect cadence and the same scheme all 16 lines; so compared to that it's hard for me to think this Part I or Part II is anything great.

Girl wanna stroll out of bounds though
Lucifer lusts she brings heat,
Like it's him on the down low
breakin' apart Earth's crust with his feats

not feelin it bro. like i said i've set your own bar too high.

06-08-2018, 08:03 PM	#9
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Sorry, but I seem to remember (a long time ago) reading a 16 from you where you had perfect cadence and the same scheme all 16 lines; so compared to that it's hard for me to think this Part I or Part II is anything great. Girl wanna stroll out of bounds though Lucifer lusts she brings heat, Like it's him on the down low breakin' apart Earth's crust with his feats not feelin it bro. like i said i've set your own bar too high.