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[Introvert]

I really enjoy the consistency and wordplay associated with the topic. It's an interesting take on the subject matter, and I'm rather excited to hear the audio. As for the lyrics that could use work, your biggest problem is stretching the wordplay.

If the Devil is an asshole than IBM
The Verizon is an eyeful of light that’s dim

Not sure if you mean that or then in the first line, considering both could work in different contexts. You could mean the Devil is a bigger asshole than IBM or mean if the devil is an asshole > IBM is something. Also, the ending of that second nod needs a little tweaking for rhythm's sake.

Then I Sprint to the bank to keep my Bitcoins safe

This line is a stretch, considering cryptocurrency is an unregulated, non-recognized form of currency. You would not be going to the bank to keep your bitcoins safe, unless you're investing them through the bank. If this is the case, then that reference will likely be overlooked.

My Twitter finger's Twitch'n as I’m AIM’n @ ya brains
Tidal waves full of blood if these AKs spray

He Sony’s ta pump .. his muthafukin breaks

That Sony wordplay is a strettttttttttttch.


Overall, I loved this. I found it entertaining as hell and pertinent. There isn't much to really fix here.

[ACTIVATE SELF]

Originally Posted by Introvert

I really enjoy the consistency and wordplay associated with the topic. It's an interesting take on the subject matter, and I'm rather excited to hear the audio. As for the lyrics that could use work, your biggest problem is stretching the wordplay.

If the Devil is an asshole than IBM
The Verizon is an eyeful of light that’s dim

Not sure if you mean that or then in the first line, considering both could work in different contexts. You could mean the Devil is a bigger asshole than IBM or mean if the devil is an asshole > IBM is something. Also, the ending of that second nod needs a little tweaking for rhythm's sake.

I actually meant "then" as opposed to "than". And the wordplay should read as I.Be.M (as in I am him/'em).

Then I Sprint to the bank to keep my Bitcoins safe

This line is a stretch, considering cryptocurrency is an unregulated, non-recognized form of currency. You would not be going to the bank to keep your bitcoins safe, unless you're investing them through the bank. If this is the case, then that reference will likely be overlooked.

All true and I'm very familiar with how crypto-currency works. The line above was more so about me being silly and interacting within the tech like world that I was trying to illustrate (so to speak), as well as a multi-play on coins, bank and safe/safe and how they are all interconnected - minus the digital concept behind the former.

y Twitter finger's Twitch'n as I’m AIM’n @ ya brains
Tidal waves full of blood if these AKs spray

He Sony’s ta pump .. his muthafukin breaks

That Sony wordplay is a strettttttttttttch.

You think "Sony's ta" and "so needs to" is a stretch? I thought they sounded virtually identical to one another.

Overall, I loved this. I found it entertaining as hell and pertinent. There isn't much to really fix here.

Thank you, sir. I thoroughly appreciate your feed, your time, your thoughts and your kind words. Respect, bro. Peace.

[ACTIVATE SELF]

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