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05-21-2018, 06:45 AM
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White Earl
Join Date: Jan 2013
Location: Philly Cat.
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Cool. And cheesy at times. The closer made.me cringe. For one it was waayyyyy toooo.wordy. for.2 its just so cliche.
The rest was good though. I understand ur style now a little better which makes ur work easier to read. Keep it up. Try to avoid the wordy bars. Think it would help tbh
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