Grinder.

Geno · 04-03-2018, 09:30 AM

Partially drained, squeeze dried, hard to explain
Even harder to make arrangements while im caught in this daize
Rugged routine, punched in, nothing to eat
I seem to forget my lunch when i struggle with sleep
The clank of machines, old mechanics, ancient debris
Ear plugs plugged in, because safety is key
Cut resistant gloves, razor blade to the box
Ive seen lazyness lose blood, fingers shaved with an ox
Just another day on the clock, the shift changes, the numbers
To many people in this plant, photosynthesis, hunger
Were all trying to eat, be tolerant, be viable people
End of the day, we hear no see no speak no ones evils
Completely concieve rules as a way to be safe
So bend them at your will, dont complain if it breaks
Ive watched fingers get lost, dissapear, gone with the wind
Dont nobody say shit, when the lawsuit begins
Fuck it lmaooooo

Enbombz · 04-03-2018, 05:44 PM

Is this about a dude you met on grinder? Damn dude sounds like he broke your heart. This was deep, a little too graphic for me personally.

PancakeBrah · 04-03-2018, 06:35 PM

This was good. The "no one's evil" line was the best of the bunch. Interesting to see how your natural wording inclinations and ideas come across when you try a deadman-style format. It was good. I think I may like your original, rugged approach. Less complexity scheme wise, less dense, but you did it wrell. Dont mind ths at all, though.

Geno · 04-04-2018, 06:25 AM

noted. Thanks.
Enbombz. Dont be gay.

Lucipher Howlz · 04-05-2018, 01:06 AM

Yooo! I really enjoyed this. Something to represent the real working man cus nowadays it seems like a lost art...(work) manual labor. Not only that but the way you connected your concept to an excellent flow was fucking great. Your opening to safety is key was my favorite part. Too short. I wanted to read more.

ACTIVATE SELF · 04-11-2018, 10:41 AM

Edit for feed

iLL ScriptureZ · 04-11-2018, 11:31 AM

This was pretty tough for being a niche topical piece about machinery work. Or is it? You are reflecting the manual labor of "the working man" but intertwined with subtle, depressing connotations associated with your wording. Poor, such as nothing to eat, struggling to sleep, (stress), but you still go and "grind". I thought the photosynthesis line was dope, along with the shaved with an ox. Gave it a grimier feel when I read that bar. From top to bottom, I thought this piece was pretty clean.

Exis · 04-16-2018, 10:25 AM

Slick piece Geno...you always come legit with it, emotion wise it hits...flow be solid...it's always a pleasure to read work you submit my friend...

Stay uppity hombre.

ACTIVATE SELF · 04-20-2018, 12:23 PM

Real shit.

Man, you have mastered the art of communicating the everyday struggle via rhymes. Not only is this joint the truth in terms of subject matter, but it's also the truth in terms of pure lyrcism. I clung and hung on to every word you typed. You got the gift of gab, fam. Ifwt fr fr. Peace.

04-03-2018, 09:30 AM	#1
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,330 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	Grinder. Partially drained, squeeze dried, hard to explain Even harder to make arrangements while im caught in this daize Rugged routine, punched in, nothing to eat I seem to forget my lunch when i struggle with sleep The clank of machines, old mechanics, ancient debris Ear plugs plugged in, because safety is key Cut resistant gloves, razor blade to the box Ive seen lazyness lose blood, fingers shaved with an ox Just another day on the clock, the shift changes, the numbers To many people in this plant, photosynthesis, hunger Were all trying to eat, be tolerant, be viable people End of the day, we hear no see no speak no ones evils Completely concieve rules as a way to be safe So bend them at your will, dont complain if it breaks Ive watched fingers get lost, dissapear, gone with the wind Dont nobody say shit, when the lawsuit begins Fuck it lmaooooo __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

04-03-2018, 06:35 PM	#3
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	This was good. The "no one's evil" line was the best of the bunch. Interesting to see how your natural wording inclinations and ideas come across when you try a deadman-style format. It was good. I think I may like your original, rugged approach. Less complexity scheme wise, less dense, but you did it wrell. Dont mind ths at all, though. __________________ If I ventured in the slipstream Between the viaducts of your dreams Where immobil steel rims crack And the ditch in the back road stop Could you find me?

04-04-2018, 06:25 AM	#4
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,330 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	noted. Thanks. Enbombz. Dont be gay. __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

04-03-2018, 05:44 PM	#2
Enbombz Not Joog Join Date: Nov 2016 Posts: 769 Battle Record: 9-5 Rep Power: 5907770	Is this about a dude you met on grinder? Damn dude sounds like he broke your heart. This was deep, a little too graphic for me personally.

04-05-2018, 01:06 AM	#5
Lucipher Howlz Member Join Date: Mar 2018 Posts: 89 Rep Power: 4050149	Yooo! I really enjoyed this. Something to represent the real working man cus nowadays it seems like a lost art...(work) manual labor. Not only that but the way you connected your concept to an excellent flow was fucking great. Your opening to safety is key was my favorite part. Too short. I wanted to read more.

04-11-2018, 11:31 AM	#7
iLL ScriptureZ Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2018 Posts: 18 Rep Power: 0	This was pretty tough for being a niche topical piece about machinery work. Or is it? You are reflecting the manual labor of "the working man" but intertwined with subtle, depressing connotations associated with your wording. Poor, such as nothing to eat, struggling to sleep, (stress), but you still go and "grind". I thought the photosynthesis line was dope, along with the shaved with an ox. Gave it a grimier feel when I read that bar. From top to bottom, I thought this piece was pretty clean.

04-16-2018, 10:25 AM	#8
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Slick piece Geno...you always come legit with it, emotion wise it hits...flow be solid...it's always a pleasure to read work you submit my friend... Stay uppity hombre.