Grinder.
 

Partially drained, squeeze dried, hard to explain
Even harder to make arrangements while im caught in this daize
Rugged routine, punched in, nothing to eat
I seem to forget my lunch when i struggle with sleep
The clank of machines, old mechanics, ancient debris
Ear plugs plugged in, because safety is key
Cut resistant gloves, razor blade to the box
Ive seen lazyness lose blood, fingers shaved with an ox
Just another day on the clock, the shift changes, the numbers
To many people in this plant, photosynthesis, hunger
Were all trying to eat, be tolerant, be viable people
End of the day, we hear no see no speak no ones evils
Completely concieve rules as a way to be safe
So bend them at your will, dont complain if it breaks
Ive watched fingers get lost, dissapear, gone with the wind
Dont nobody say shit, when the lawsuit begins
Fuck it lmaooooo

Is this about a dude you met on grinder? Damn dude sounds like he broke your heart. This was deep, a little too graphic for me personally.

This was good. The "no one's evil" line was the best of the bunch. Interesting to see how your natural wording inclinations and ideas come across when you try a deadman-style format. It was good. I think I may like your original, rugged approach. Less complexity scheme wise, less dense, but you did it wrell. Dont mind ths at all, though.

noted. Thanks.
Enbombz. Dont be gay.

Yooo! I really enjoyed this. Something to represent the real working man cus nowadays it seems like a lost art...(work) manual labor. Not only that but the way you connected your concept to an excellent flow was fucking great. Your opening to safety is key was my favorite part. Too short. I wanted to read more.

Edit for feed

This was pretty tough for being a niche topical piece about machinery work. Or is it? You are reflecting the manual labor of "the working man" but intertwined with subtle, depressing connotations associated with your wording. Poor, such as nothing to eat, struggling to sleep, (stress), but you still go and "grind". I thought the photosynthesis line was dope, along with the shaved with an ox. Gave it a grimier feel when I read that bar. From top to bottom, I thought this piece was pretty clean.

Slick piece Geno...you always come legit with it, emotion wise it hits...flow be solid...it's always a pleasure to read work you submit my friend...

Stay uppity hombre.

Real shit.

Man, you have mastered the art of communicating the everyday struggle via rhymes. Not only is this joint the truth in terms of subject matter, but it's also the truth in terms of pure lyrcism. I clung and hung on to every word you typed. You got the gift of gab, fam. Ifwt fr fr. Peace.