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ACTIVATE SELF · 03-24-2018, 11:07 AM

You know, half of this would be pretty dope if you ever focused on formulating a complete thought into a solid bar. The scattered and random ideas you produce are intriguing, but don't add up to much on the page. Still and strangely enough it seems that every 3 or 4 words that you write makes me go "ahhhhh, nice" for like a half a nanosecond and then it's right back to jibber jabber and jargon, and then "ahhh nice" again. Long story short. I guess I like this. And I guess I don't. But maybe it's both? I don't know. But "ray gun" and "butt gas" stuck with me. Interesting work. Peace.

03-24-2018, 11:07 AM	#3
ACTIVATE SELF Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2017 Posts: 783 Battle Record: 2-1 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 19584278	You know, half of this would be pretty dope if you ever focused on formulating a complete thought into a solid bar. The scattered and random ideas you produce are intriguing, but don't add up to much on the page. Still and strangely enough it seems that every 3 or 4 words that you write makes me go "ahhhhh, nice" for like a half a nanosecond and then it's right back to jibber jabber and jargon, and then "ahhh nice" again. Long story short. I guess I like this. And I guess I don't. But maybe it's both? I don't know. But "ray gun" and "butt gas" stuck with me. Interesting work. Peace.