Galactic War

ACTIVATE SELF · 12-19-2017, 10:59 AM

I went back and re:read this again ... this time on a larger screen, which changed the entire format of the verse. That allowed me to see your lines in full. Thus, I was better able to pick up on your inner and compound couplets. This joint flowed a lot smoother than I initially thought. Some of the scheme could still be tweaked a bit. But in all sincerity, I definitely overlooked a hefty portion of your rhyming technique. My bad, NY. Correction made.

12-19-2017, 10:59 AM	#5
ACTIVATE SELF Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2017 Posts: 783 Battle Record: 2-1 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 19584278	I went back and re:read this again ... this time on a larger screen, which changed the entire format of the verse. That allowed me to see your lines in full. Thus, I was better able to pick up on your inner and compound couplets. This joint flowed a lot smoother than I initially thought. Some of the scheme could still be tweaked a bit. But in all sincerity, I definitely overlooked a hefty portion of your rhyming technique. My bad, NY. Correction made.