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Born eccentric, so forced detention maybe penitentiary
See since elementary, normal wasn't my element These Humans just didn't seem legitament, Thoughts of taking a little medicine called defiance, We all need it! Make alliance! Raise your fist to the highest Altitude with attitude say I make the rules I live by if I want to smoke to my eyes looks like a martians Skin portion the government shoudn't pardon, our life is limited And people want to be in control, when we don't have it You could be born with a disability, or die walking up the street Swerve off your car accidentely, so start living with that body Your soul reincarnated into. Experiment with what the Earth gives Because one day you might regret it. |
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Sorry, I'm not feeling it. simple to me, add more creativity & complexity.
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O.O' really? Simple. and not creative? break down that flow for me.
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Altitude with attitude say I make the rules
I live by if I want to smoke to my eyes looks like a martians Skin portion the government shoudn't pardon, our life is limited And people want to be in control, when we don't have it You could be born with a disability, or die walking up the street Swerve off your car accidentely, so start living with that body Your soul reincarnated into. Experiment with what the Earth gives Because one day you might regret it. None of this rhymes.
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Thanks pal
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Creative and innovative rhyme scheme can be tricky huh witt?
Here i'll break it to you A(internal)BBBBCBBB(internal)DDFF. And Alot more of internals, slant rhymes and couplets to create the rhyme scheme. Psh It doesn't rhyme nigga learn your fundamentals. Also managing to fit 8 syllables in one line without sounding Overbearing. Aint up to this level. Last edited by KennyCerealBowl; 05-19-2013 at 07:20 PM. |
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Yea this wasnt nice dude
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This cheerio motha fucka got all mouthy about netcees and said a bunch of bullshit
and now he posting on it. Lol. What a queef |
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Ugh i wanted more feeds nd im to lazy too register somewhere else.
natural is that you code? Lmaoo got butthurt cus niggas said your true mc drop was wack. came in with all that confidence just to be shut down. But your right I shoudn't have posted here should have known better that only you type of niggas would do this type of shit. Not feed me say its wack and gain some internet bravado lol |
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No hate but This was wack, some lines dont rhyme and the piece is boring and simple as fuck, no need to be cocky my dude. Just step ur game up
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Lmao guy die in a blazing fire u flaming fag boy...I don't recall anyone saying a true emcee was whack...Just wasnt getting feed is all...Go back to rr with your tail tucked in between ur legs you irrelevant cum stain...
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This is sum real nigga shit.
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cats break doors with in Sturbridge Village with cartilage that snap in four places Rhyme scheme ABBABAB(internal)BBBBBBB(external)CABABABBBABABBB fucking retard why don't you just write this flatulence in a notebook, write rave reviews in the margins, and hide that shit under your bed? anyone that don't think your nice is auto whack Cool story brah
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Can we stop the hideous fucking free posts? Jesus, there are some other pieces that could be at the top receiving feed. Someone man up and quit the bickering
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I'm better than you.
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I just had to go through this fuckin thread and delete like 50 fuckin posts. Do not shamelessly up this wack shit again faggot. Go drop feed on other posts and then I'll reopen this.
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