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08-09-2016, 04:44 AM
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ghost in the matrix
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I like how this was a free verse, it didn't need rhymes to be amazing. I like how you used doe as dough like money but it also works as if you're the one out hunting those deer, like you bringing home the bacon AND the venison.
Dope verse, clearly above most of the heads on here. I doubt many will be able to catch all the genius wordplays and second layers of this verse. I love it
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