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12-30-2015, 06:30 PM
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I wanted to like this, but this just doesn't translate well for me. I see punchline potential and innuendo, but these aspects were not showcased properly imo. The flow was poem-ish and very clunky, assuming it was intended to rhyme. Just keep it up and I think you could really put work together that will be noteworthy.
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