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Old 11-02-2015, 02:35 AM   #5
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so this actually happened? you're in the military? who knew.
pretty cool, good description of events, favorite part was here..

Instead of pressing the brake, I floor it to shit.
The compact jumps the stop, skirts the sidewalk,
Narrowly misses a bystander, slams glass and drywall.
The aluminum frames scrape, crystals and shards fall.
The impact sickening, unreal! We're in the salon's hall.

solid as fuck great action and imagery. very effective writing.
20000 in damages was a little awkward in the middle of it. makes me 100% sure this actually happened. did it? jw. flow was pretty sick too. clean little piece.
True Story bro. And I'm out of the military now. But yea, it was crazy. Thanks for the feed!
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