New Perspectives

CopyPat · 10-07-2015, 09:03 PM

Fox my NI**A!

haha. You're very good. this subject matter wasn't my favorite but i think u said this was for a topical or something? Your writing and imagery is very impressive. you carried a complex scheme throughout and made that shit butter smooth. this verse had some length but I did not labor through it because it was written with a real sense of flow, that's tough to do well and u nailed it. only a couple parts i didn't like. rhyming in action with inaction. hahahaha that's david pixley bad. wtf were u thinking? also cancerous whores and cancel his chores seemed like a last minute cheap rhyme to me too. like forced and filler, but besides those 2 this was really really good. did u win said battle with this?

10-07-2015, 09:03 PM	#5
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	Fox my NI**A! haha. You're very good. this subject matter wasn't my favorite but i think u said this was for a topical or something? Your writing and imagery is very impressive. you carried a complex scheme throughout and made that shit butter smooth. this verse had some length but I did not labor through it because it was written with a real sense of flow, that's tough to do well and u nailed it. only a couple parts i didn't like. rhyming in action with inaction. hahahaha that's david pixley bad. wtf were u thinking? also cancerous whores and cancel his chores seemed like a last minute cheap rhyme to me too. like forced and filler, but besides those 2 this was really really good. did u win said battle with this? __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.